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January 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yeah! A new chapter! When is the Shrek-story going to be updated?
I like it how slowly Naruto begins to get interested in Sasuke: How he first caresses him and looks at him and only very late kisses his neck.
What made me wonder: It is understandable that Naruto undresses Sasuke completely, as he has to get out of his wet clothes. But why does he feel so embarassed about it? He is not yet aware that he is interested in Sasuke in a sexual way, and they are both boys. And why does he undress himself completely? Why does he not keep his underwear?
Looking forward to what is going to come! I am sure that you will pull it off in a sensitive way, that is in a way that is not just plain pornography, reducing the partners to objects of their desire.
susanna
I like it how slowly Naruto begins to get interested in Sasuke: How he first caresses him and looks at him and only very late kisses his neck.
What made me wonder: It is understandable that Naruto undresses Sasuke completely, as he has to get out of his wet clothes. But why does he feel so embarassed about it? He is not yet aware that he is interested in Sasuke in a sexual way, and they are both boys. And why does he undress himself completely? Why does he not keep his underwear?
Looking forward to what is going to come! I am sure that you will pull it off in a sensitive way, that is in a way that is not just plain pornography, reducing the partners to objects of their desire.
susanna
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January 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was an awesome chapter I can't wait for more. Please update soon. I love this story. Naruto isn't a wimp and I'm glad that this story shows that he can be just a strong as Sasuke or even stronger.
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January 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh wow.. I bend in the dust. you are really really good to write.. seriously, if you ever give out a book I`m sooo gonna buy it.
please, please!! update soon. I read the whole thing in one go, I couldn`t put it down.. hehe. ^_^ I love the way you can convey feelings into your writing, you paint beautiful mental pictures. :)) ya ne..
please, please!! update soon. I read the whole thing in one go, I couldn`t put it down.. hehe. ^_^ I love the way you can convey feelings into your writing, you paint beautiful mental pictures. :)) ya ne..
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January 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What will happen next?! Hurry with the next chapter!!
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January 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great story looking forward to the next chapter.
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December 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
So Naruto and Sasuke finally meet again? What happens now? Hurry with the next chapter!!!
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December 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! Keep up the good work! I love the way you make your characters act and I really think Naruto's a good father! Write more I enjoy reading your story a lot :o)
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December 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*_* Write write write *pinches your cheek* *pokes you*
You are so talented!!!! I love you for writing such a story and especially the way you describe the emotions =D its just so fantastic and real. You have an unique writing style and i love how you write all characters. Awwww and Haruhi is very cute~~~~
This story is one of my favourites now~~Update soon please
You are so talented!!!! I love you for writing such a story and especially the way you describe the emotions =D its just so fantastic and real. You have an unique writing style and i love how you write all characters. Awwww and Haruhi is very cute~~~~
This story is one of my favourites now~~Update soon please
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December 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Liked it as usual. Haruhi is really cute, and a genius in the bargain. And Sasuke with Karin and Suigetsu getting on his nerves, so much that they cause him a headache. :-D And the boys meet without Haruhi being present, which is perhaps best. (The crucial point in all mpreg Sasunaru stories: How does Sasuke react?)
What I like most about this story are the interactions between Naruto and his daughter.
I hope you can take some tiny criticism: It is understandable that the girl wants to know as much as she can about Sasuke and that she wants to connect to him. Actually this is one of the points that make your story so wonderful. Sewing the Uchiha crest on her things was a very believable thing to do. But making her intuitively wear the things Sasuke wore during the first season of "Naruto" is perhaps a bit overdone, at least to my personal taste... And I don't see Naruto or Jiraya allowing her to show the crest openly in Konoha. After all, Sasuke would first have to acknowledge her.
I hope it's okay that I said this. I really like your stories (both of them) and they are among the few that I regularly check for updates.
What I like most about this story are the interactions between Naruto and his daughter.
I hope you can take some tiny criticism: It is understandable that the girl wants to know as much as she can about Sasuke and that she wants to connect to him. Actually this is one of the points that make your story so wonderful. Sewing the Uchiha crest on her things was a very believable thing to do. But making her intuitively wear the things Sasuke wore during the first season of "Naruto" is perhaps a bit overdone, at least to my personal taste... And I don't see Naruto or Jiraya allowing her to show the crest openly in Konoha. After all, Sasuke would first have to acknowledge her.
I hope it's okay that I said this. I really like your stories (both of them) and they are among the few that I regularly check for updates.
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December 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG! This story is going to be awesome! Please more I need more.