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Hey there! Your story had such a wonderful plot but there were so many spelling and grammatical mistakes I nearly cried! I can't believe it was already beta-ed! Please check over your spelling!

.....wow, I did not expect that. Good story all the way through, all though it I think it would be better if like, he got reborn or something, other than that, great job ^-^

Your story is interesting, but I keep getting distracted by the errors in spelling and wording and such. Maybe get a beta?

This was a really well written, exciting and smexy story. Though I would have loved to see a happy ending between Itachi and Naruto.

I cannot believe you actually made Naruto die. =( so depressing. This is why I dislike reading and watching dramas with sad ending...totally dampens my mood. The ending is good and different but I was sorely hoping for a happier ending with an very alive and kicking Naruto. Hope you can write some sort of sequel with an aLive Naruto. hehe Thank you for the story though.

HOW COULD YOU END IT LIKE THAT! HOW HOW HOW! -dies-

OH FUCKING SHIT!!!! You know if I could bold that I would because that was the one thing that was flowing through my mind when I read this. You know I found my password, logged into my y gal! account the username is Stoicgenius and when I checked your page it wasn't posted, I think you were behind a few chapters. But seriously after I finish writing my 15 page paper for school which is due today (tee hee hee), I am going to review there because you definitely have to tell me your thought process going through this chapter. I know people sometimes see things differently so you have to help me understand how this ending came about; your thought processes and everything so I can see things your way.

You know, I am not even one of those hopeless romantics and I almost cried for Naruto. I read this when you first posted this and it took my brain this long to process the fact that no it isn't some late April Fool's joke and yes Naruto is dead. I really was expecting some haha at the end and a note saying you are going to put up the real ending. I guess jokes on me huh, lol! But I am so upset at you, honestly if you killed Sasuke off along with Naruto then I don't think I would be as upset, but since Sasuke is immortal you can't kill Naruto off. Twisted logic I know, but my twisted brain can't get off the fact that you killed Naruto for two reasons:

1) Sasuke was a major ass throughout this fic, I can't believe you let him one up on Naru-chan. I can't believe that Sasuke won which is what I see this ending as, and Sasuke shouldn't win in this he doesn't deserve it. When I read this I seriously wanted to wipe that smug smile off his face with a fist, I don't care what remorse he showed the moment after he shot Naruto, there in the club he was so happy that Naruto was gone because now he had Itachi all to himself. Its like ohmifreakingod how can Sasuke win.

2) I know I said I wanted to see more Kiba, but definitely not like this. I mean how can we get some yummy ItaNaru smex in the oneshot series if Naruto is dead. I had all this hope that the series would feature kinky ItaNaru sex in kinky positions with other people, including Kiba, but really that can't happen if he's dead lol!

On a final note though I don't hate you, I know you were expecting to get burned in reviews but this still is one of the best if not the best threesome fic with them that I have read in a long time, I think there are only like two others that were as well done as this one, and this definitely beats the new cropping of ItaSasuNaru/ItaNaruSasu fics out there. I think the problem with doing a threesome fic with the three is that usually people tend to focus more on ItaSasu and Naru is left out which I hate, which is why I usually don't read them. But you really didn't have that here, plus it had drama without being too angsty, emo, and dramatic, the characterization was good, especially Kiba and Naruto, the plot kept you on your toes and it was filled with great sex. What more can you want in a fic... oh yeah for Naruto to live, lol!

I know I still can't get over the fact you killed Naruto and Sasuke won. I really was expecting something like Itachi saves Naruto, makes him immortal, they say fuck you Sasuke and then have great ItaNaru sex. But then reading your ending it would have been hot if Itachi continued the game with Naruto, so instead of Itachi and Sasuke scouting out new toys in the club it would have been 'Tachi and Naru. Come to think about it that would have been so hot! Anyway I am so wasting time at this rate I won't get my paper done and I don't have much time to finish it. But just know it may not have been the ending I wanted but I still love you, just make it up the oneshot series, please?

Normally, I would be extremely sad and maybe bawl my eyes out. But I think this is actually a good way to end this story. 'Cause it couldn't have had a happy ending no matter how much us readers may have wanted it, Itachi and Sasuke are just too messed up. Poor Kiba.

ja ne and I hope to read another of your stories

Your story is really good the only problem is your spelling mistakes, like for example you write lipp when it's only one 'p' and when you write maybee it's only one 'e'. There are other mistakes too, you should get a beta to correct your work. Other than that I throughly enjoyed reading your story.

omg! you killed naruto!!!!!!!!!! :( I was hoping for a ever happy after ending but this ending is interesting too ^^

ty for the new chapter