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whats with the first word of every paragraph being its own line?

tayuya and kin please. i think we can all agree that if naruto could save them then he would. besides, the way orochimaru undoubtfully treats them, i doubt they stay out of sheer loyalty.

great story cant wait for the next chapter

I like it. Keep the good stuff coming.

Excellent story! Can't wait for more to come out. and I like the summon choices so far, so no complaints from me.

very cool story! I can't wait to read more! (not trying to rush you or anything! I promise!)
as for summons, here are my suggestions:
Ino: Horses
Hinata: Owls
I dunno why, but it just seems to fit (to me, anyway).

very cool! I like the plot progression, and the timings awesome!
I noticed a few chapters back you mentioned not knowing Hanabi's age, and I remember in the anime (around the time of the chunin exams) Hiashi telling Kurenai that even though Hanabi is "two years [Hinata's] junior" she was still better than her. ^^; I realize that I am a nerd.

Interesting story, the plot seems well thought and i'm looking forward to see it evolve. Tne hyuuga tea party will be fun to read.
By the way, Ino's comment about sharing a shower, made me smile. I hope it was a prophetic one .

A little criticism is the change of ino's behaviour. not that i mind the change itself, it's good to see her more confident , but i find it too fast. on a related note, i was expecting more reaction from her after naruto's speech about "his girls".

To finish , i know there is little hope to see one day the sequel of that story, but reviews can't hurt and might even remotivate the author

thanks for reading through my spelling mistakes ( english isn't my native language)

Will you please come back? I want to read the rest of this story.

No Hope for you to return to the fiction working