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December 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I have an idea for Sakura (she is in the harem right?)
Why not have Ino talk her and bring her out of the sasuke-fangirllyness (is that even a word?)
My e-mail is hidan117@yahoo.com if you like to talk some more.
Why not have Ino talk her and bring her out of the sasuke-fangirllyness (is that even a word?)
My e-mail is hidan117@yahoo.com if you like to talk some more.
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December 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'll be happy to wait! Can't wait to see the next chapter!
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December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well done. This story is well written and has great potential. I really like the way you reworked the teams and changed Naruto's character ever so slightly without completely transforming him. Can't wait to see the next chapter!
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December 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Love the direction that this fic is taking. This is currently one of my two most favorite Naruto fics on AFF.net. I like the pervert view Naruto has and that things are progressing at a more logical pace then in most fics I've read. Keep up the great work!
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December 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good update. I, too, wonder just how loud I'll be screaming Naruto's name with my legs around his head, and how wild Kurenai-sensei's hair will look after Naruto gives her a good roll. Keep it coming.
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sweet, another chapter. Awesome. Keep it coming!
Nothing wrong with this one to comment on, things flowed smoothly, etc.
Nothing wrong with this one to comment on, things flowed smoothly, etc.
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very well done. I like the pace that you set in this story. Doesn't jump right into the good parts but at the same time doesn't bore me completely. Although to be fair I skipped the first chapter. I don't like to read Kyuubi interaction and a whole chapter of it that completely explains the plot of the story was a bit much for me.
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December 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A nice chapter, but I wish to comment on Naruto's cons you mention in your author's note at the bottom in a bit.
As for how you switched the teams around that will make for some interesting times. The part with Shikamaru and Chouji asking Naruto to look out for Ino was quite nice. I can almost see Naruto going to Shikamaru's and Chouji's houses to ask their fathers about how they helped to support and/orprotect Inochi when he used his techniques. The reason behind asking Shikaku and Chouza is because unlike Inochi who knows what the technique is, does, and weaknesses, Shikaku and Chouza had to support their teammate. While Ino may not be completely happy that Naruto did that, she'd understand that it was because Shikaku and Chouza's experience of being Inochi's teammates helps him think of how to work with her. Inochi once he hears of it from Shikaku and Chouza will be happy that Naruto is trying to learn how to work with Ino by getting advice on how his teammates worked with him.
Team 7 will definately have some prolems though since Sasuke is a loner and Kiba operates more along the lines of a pack animal (they'd just need to find out who's alpha). Team 8 (although in the manga Asuma's team was Team 10), will actually be a pretty good team, since Shikamaru can hold people and give Shino's bugs a chance to drain opponents without them reacting.
In general his cons can be attributed to one of three things. His lack of a family/guardian/caregiver that would teach him what most children would learn how to do properly, he's had to learn on his own, never did learn it, or does not see a good reason to do it (the cons cuased by this can be corrected with the help of his other team members with some time). The lack of socializing due to how people treated him has led to his poor socialization skills as well as his attention seeking (while the attention seeking also relates to his lack of family, it relates also to his having no friends really until after the Academy).
The final one would relate to the time Naruto spent in the orphanage and would mainly deal with his eating habits. I had an uncle who was in a group home for people and they only recieved set amounts for what they could eat at mealtimes. The problem with that was though was that other people would take your food if you didn't eat it fast enough (and the staff didn't always catch it, when they were looking). As for Naruto's eating that will take time and having it repeatedly mentioned that nobody's going to take/spill/ruin his food (that's what happened with my uncle, we had to mention that nobody was going to take his food and he slowly got better, going to a different place helped a lot as well). But yes Naruto's problems with time and effort on the part of others can help change him to be better around others (while Kyuubi will be able to help with some of it, other things would be best dealt with by Kurenai and the others).
Anyways keep up the good work (sorry if it comes across as a rant about his cons, but just look at how kids who grow up in the wild are like).
As for how you switched the teams around that will make for some interesting times. The part with Shikamaru and Chouji asking Naruto to look out for Ino was quite nice. I can almost see Naruto going to Shikamaru's and Chouji's houses to ask their fathers about how they helped to support and/orprotect Inochi when he used his techniques. The reason behind asking Shikaku and Chouza is because unlike Inochi who knows what the technique is, does, and weaknesses, Shikaku and Chouza had to support their teammate. While Ino may not be completely happy that Naruto did that, she'd understand that it was because Shikaku and Chouza's experience of being Inochi's teammates helps him think of how to work with her. Inochi once he hears of it from Shikaku and Chouza will be happy that Naruto is trying to learn how to work with Ino by getting advice on how his teammates worked with him.
Team 7 will definately have some prolems though since Sasuke is a loner and Kiba operates more along the lines of a pack animal (they'd just need to find out who's alpha). Team 8 (although in the manga Asuma's team was Team 10), will actually be a pretty good team, since Shikamaru can hold people and give Shino's bugs a chance to drain opponents without them reacting.
In general his cons can be attributed to one of three things. His lack of a family/guardian/caregiver that would teach him what most children would learn how to do properly, he's had to learn on his own, never did learn it, or does not see a good reason to do it (the cons cuased by this can be corrected with the help of his other team members with some time). The lack of socializing due to how people treated him has led to his poor socialization skills as well as his attention seeking (while the attention seeking also relates to his lack of family, it relates also to his having no friends really until after the Academy).
The final one would relate to the time Naruto spent in the orphanage and would mainly deal with his eating habits. I had an uncle who was in a group home for people and they only recieved set amounts for what they could eat at mealtimes. The problem with that was though was that other people would take your food if you didn't eat it fast enough (and the staff didn't always catch it, when they were looking). As for Naruto's eating that will take time and having it repeatedly mentioned that nobody's going to take/spill/ruin his food (that's what happened with my uncle, we had to mention that nobody was going to take his food and he slowly got better, going to a different place helped a lot as well). But yes Naruto's problems with time and effort on the part of others can help change him to be better around others (while Kyuubi will be able to help with some of it, other things would be best dealt with by Kurenai and the others).
Anyways keep up the good work (sorry if it comes across as a rant about his cons, but just look at how kids who grow up in the wild are like).
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December 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yeah nice list...can there be boys too? :puppy eyes: i like my narusasu..pwease?
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December 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good update. looking forward to more!