rate_review Reviews

this is a good story. please do more chapters.

you really need to check the spelling and punctuation errors in chapter 1. for example, for naruto's date question, it's afterwards, not after words.

there are spelling and punctuation errors throughout the entire story.

I quit frankly find your story inspiring after I finished reading it I wrote 10 chapters in a day for my own fic. im a good plot weaver and if you find your self stuck I can drop what im doing atm and help you with a chapter or two. Ideas flow in to me like water falls at Niagara. i would consider it an honor. i never check my emails though.

back to the review.
naru/hina i love that its my favorite couple. I also like how you put sasuke and Sakura.
if I have a suggestion for the next levels of elemental training

earth: in in stead of making a boulder explode you are to make it shatter like glass, then for the final training do the same but insted of shattering you make boulders in to hundreds of pebbles

Fire: simialar to stage one lightning and could be proctored by itachi, second level make the flames dance in air third Write out an entire poem using fire chakra in the ground while keeping it contained and not turinging in to a wild fire.

Lightning: second level make balls of lightning chakra in your palm then toss toss them at rocks for a minute explosion. third try and make a blade out of lighting and then learn chidori

your already know wind and I have no clue on water.

and making kakashi's books in danged so he would teach PRICELESS!

hope you add the new chapter soon

This fic is wonderful first off im happy its not yaoi, there's too much of that. and secondly its very well developed and has a great storyline so plz keep writing im looking forward to more of your work

and i may have only written one review but thats only cuz i couldn't stop reading long enough to write one my only chance was at the end of the updates so plz write more i'll be waiting

wow that was awsome ... please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

angel

Brr. On a word, my friend.

The correct speech should be NI SAN, not NEE SAN. Or is Itachi a girl?

Ni San means brother, Nee San sister.

Otherwise it is an interesting chapter. Can't wait to see the fight between Naruto and Kisame.

you didn't pay much attention to the first step of the rasengan did you.

Hey Shadow how is everything. I liked the update but I think ur going to have alot to think about. Especially for Itachi and Kisame going into Konoha and who is all inside the Hokage's room... Hope to hear from you soon. Keep up the great work til next time.

Hi. Long time no see I guess.

Sorry for my absence. I had a few problems of my own. I like your new chapter very much. I eager to see the sparring between Kisame and Naruto.
It is a nice idea to give Tobi another Uchiha as assistance.
I'm eager to read more of your Story.

Keep up the good work.