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Chapter 3: Love the line: “Well then do something! I’m going crazy here!” XD . . . . Ahahaha! “‘What?!’ both of them snapped.” XD . . . . I like how they’re going through this step-by-step to see exactly where the problem is. . . . That’s a great line: “I have feelings for you. How come I don’t feel like jumping you?” XDD . . . . Whoa, she’s engaged? How did that happen? o_o . . . . Is he even considering that he could just be taking advantage of Hinata if he went for her because of this? õ_ô . . . . I get the feeling it’s NOT going to be that easy.
Nice opening paragraph for Sasuke. . . . (*snicker*) “Half-clothed maniac.” XD . . . . So it’s roughly a month later? Has Sakura kept cool about that little incident?
Uneasy, eh? Curious. . . . Errr, what? “Sitting . . . what kitchen?” o_O . . . . Whoa, interesting details about the bathroom. . . . Dude, Sasuke, they’re not “just painful reminders of what you had.” If things get painful, put them away and quit moping! Jeez! . . . . Ooooh, scary cliffie! =D

Chapter 4: Yike! First of all, please put spaces in between paragraphs! My poor eyeeeeeeeeesssss!! H’okay, now that that’s out of my system, on with the story! ^_^
“Eerie” is right! Did Sasuke catch him at a “bad time?” ^^ . . . . Love this creepy scene! =D . . . . LUNGE! =D
Dude, Naruto, he’s not staying because 1) He’s not like that, and 2) You’re creeping him out. XD . . . . He’s kind of “gone,” isn’t he? . . . . Love this tension. . . . And why the hell, Naruto, would Sasuke admit defeat? He’ll fight until he falls over in a faint, you know that! . . . . Okay, I’m getting worried for Sasuke here. Lust isn’t the only thing that clouds Naruto’s brain when he gets like this, he also gets violent. And if he’s this clouded over . . . well. . . . Oh jeez, that’s scary. “Why’d you have to be stubborn and violent?” Who’s violent?? õ_õ . . . . I really like this scene. =D . . . . Heheh, Naruto’s sniffing Sasuke and Sasuke’s all like, “What the hell?” XD . . . . Love the “reasoning” in Naruto’s mind. . . . LOVE the ending to this scene! =DD
Love Sasuke’s frustration and apprehension. . . . The mention of the whisker-marks and the moonlight alerted me as to how good a picture this makes.
IT WAS GOOD! =DDD No, I wasn’t confused this time around! Much better!

Chapter 5: Huh. This chapter has a title. I don’t think the others did. How come? . . . . Oh man, I love this line: “The teme needed to learn to stay calm and comfortable around and underneath him.” He intends to have more moments like this one in the future, doesn’t he!! ^_^ . . . . Satisfaction at seeing someone you like get hurt in the solar plexus? That freakin’ hurts! õ_o . . . . Luuuuv this scene. :heart: . . . . I wonder how high up Naruto bit him? Sasuke does have a habit of wearing high collars, after all. . . . Hmm, good question, Naruto, good question. By the way, you might want to fix your bathroom a little, especially if you plan on having Sasuke over to visit in the future.
Interesting dream. That’d make another good picture. . . . Man, that dream was cool! And it’s hard to write cool dream scenes!
No, it wasn’t boring at all! I liked it! And no, the characters aren’t too OOC, their IC enough! ^_^

Chapter 6: I like the opening scene, but um you spelled “damned” as “dammed.” . . . Aww, this scene is so cute. :heart: . . . . Heh. I’ll betcha Sasuke’s gonna wake up while Naruto’s hickeying him. ^^ . . . . Nice ending to that segment too! ^_^
Oooh (*chuckles nervously*) Sasuke’s pissed. I love how he tells Naruto to shut up, that was cool writing. And then the insight of what happens when Sasuke loses his cool. ^_^ . . . . Hawt dayamn, you bet your ass he’s hot when he’s mad! It’s one of my favorite things about him! =D . . . . Ah well, I would feel sorry for you, Naruto, but you put him through hell last night and then got him in the SO-LAR PLEX-US. Under those circumstances, getting socked in the face is pretty mild. ô_o
Omg, I had no idea Sasuke was going to think that way in the next scene when I wrote that sentence up there. 9_9 . . . . “Counting to ten twice and failing.” Good one. XD . . . . Oh, so he’s not a virgin? Interesting. . . . Really, Sasuke, is it any wonder that some people in town still don’t like you if that’s how you treat the people you have sex with? . . . Nice job on his denial and his musings. . . . This is really going to be a challenge for Naruto if Sasuke’s purposefully going to make it harder for him. . . . Whoa, I love the paragraph starting with, “He picked up his strewn clothes.” I always think it’s cool when the reader stops right when the character stops, because they’re thinking on the same track. =D . . . . WAITAMINUTE!! “Strewn clothes?” O.O Did he sleep naked? You didn’t mention that little detail! Oh wait. (*checks*) Oh. “Pale, broad back.” Should’ve guessed. ^_^'' . . . . Oh, that was mean, Sasuke, ripping the curtains on the way out.
I like Naruto’s feelings in the office. Cute. ^^ . . . . Whoa, bad choice of words, Naruto: “We had a fight, he lost and blacked out, so I sort of . . . you know.” No, she doesn’t know! That kind of talk can make enemies, damn it! O_O . . . . :) This scene is cute. Tsunade’s laughing. ^^ . . . . Nice touch about his hair falling in his face. . . . Huh. Naruto had that foresight? Interesting. . . . Um, “Naruto could be so mule-is sometimes.” I think you mean “mulish.” . . . . I like Naruto’s argument. . . . Ohhh man, what an evil way to end this chapter! =D
I liked it! I really liked it! Please don’t disappear before this fic is finished, it’s too good for that! =D

I Love it chapter 5 was great and I know chapter 6 will be even better so update soon.

Excellent! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

It may have been short but I enjoyed it none the less. I was very happy that Naruto did not complete advantage of Sasuke even though the opportunity was there. I'm hoping that he will be able to convince Sasuke to be a willing participant in their little mating ritual.

it's really good! i'd love to read some more. anyway, if you need a beta, i'd do that. ;)

Glad to see the update!!... hmm.. wonder what Sasuke will do when he sees his neck??.. that will be amusing.. XD

Please update soon!!!

hey!! short chapter. but defintely worth it. love this!!!