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October 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Thats a good way to end a chapter! lol
Cant wait to find out what happens next.
Cant wait to find out what happens next.
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May 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
have naruto kill that mother f*cking bastard very painfully i suggest reinserting that stick then following it up with a rasengan thousand years off pain so that he shits pancakes for the next 5 seconds of his life before he gets
killed as slowly as possible with kyuubi's youki (cos there is no way to treat youki poisoning if its done to a great extent.
killed as slowly as possible with kyuubi's youki (cos there is no way to treat youki poisoning if its done to a great extent.
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March 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
So far an interesting fic. The pairing kinda makes a sort of believeable sense if taken in the context you've written. The lemon you was good albeit brief, and the second chapter was a bit short. That cliff hanger was just mean! You've done a good job keeping the characters personalities in check and making sure they aren't OOC. Over all, I think this is pretty good, but you should try to expand your chapters a bit. Keep writing, I cant wait for the next installment!
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October 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aw, it's been seven months! I love this story, so I'm hoping you still plan to finish it!
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August 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is now one of my favorite stories. Well-written, good storyline, well-detailed sex scene, believable character reactions, and to wrap it all up, a naru/hina/hana pairing, which is now my favorite pairing. I was a little skeptical at first but nonetheless, I'm glad I started reading it. I am definitely getting my friends to read this. So keep up the great work and hope ya update soon...... Please update soon *begs on hands and knees* PLEASE!!!
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June 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So far so good. It is a bit odd that Hinata would be so willing to share her husband with her sister, but it works. Please update soon.
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May 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like you Naruto story so far. You've done a good job of explain what the person is thinking or feeling at the time (a bit lacking in Hinata's case, but I can forgive that). Keep up the good work and I look forward to the next chapter
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May 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So far I like this stor I just wih you would hurry up and update the story
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May 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Love this story, hate the cliffy. Thought the pairings were interesting. Neji/Sakura and Lee/Tenten are new ones, everything else is played out. I would have put Shika in a threesome with Ino and Temari (because regardless of how troublesome it would be, he'd be the one to end up in the situation), and Chouji with Ayame at the Ramen stand. Wonder who attacked her, and what Foxy is gonna do to them. I also stand firmly behind the stance, that killing Jiraiya was hella lame, and the whole six bodies thing made Pein seem even lamer than Emo-spaz.
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April 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Although the stories in this site are all for the smut, I like that Naruto is wondering how will he handle two wives instead of just jumping at the chance.
Also, could you remove the author note, please? It has already done its purpose, and it's a bit disappointing to go for the next chapter and find that.
Also, could you remove the author note, please? It has already done its purpose, and it's a bit disappointing to go for the next chapter and find that.