rate_review Reviews

Very good story. I can't wait to read more of it. Keep up the good work.

I really like this. You need to update soon. Like now. Now would be good, and just finish this story. I have to know everything.

TW...where are you. You made me hooked onto this one! Love the tension and the thrill of waiting WHEN Sasuke's gonna discover Naruto knew all along, also who's gonna make the first move, etc etc...AHHHH~~!! Please update (ToT) <- teary eyed

oh I love this and I hope naruto comes back safe.

YO! TW where have ya been???

I MISS YOU!! please come back!!!

i love the fact that you are being soo evil to sasuke!

*evil cackle* neji is gonna be floored when he finds out who he's been chasing.....

TW!! where oh where have ya been?

WE MISS YOU L9OTS!!!


please come back,

I know most people love long letters and all but I like the straight to the point, so PLEASE keep updating!!!!! I just found this story and fell in LOVE with it. I hope you don't forget it.


NaRuFaIrY86

oh that's just too cruel
Still, Susuke the Kuinouchi= WIN!

I like this story, and the plot is a lot of fun, but some of the characterization, in certain places, seems a little off to me. For example:

Sachiko turned to see the Hyuga's Byakugan activated and she grabbed his shirtfront, pulled one of his own kunai out to press it to his crotch, and snarled, "Hyuga if you don't turn your eyes off I swear I'll castrate you and bronze your nuts to hang on my wall! Understood?"

That was a little too cutsey coming from Sasuke, not to mention a little too verbose. *Sakura* might say something like this, but NOT Sasuke. Sasuke never makes threats because he's really strong; he gets right to the point most of the time, and in this case probably would have pulled the kunai, just as he did in the story, and then simply told Neji "stop looking." (In contrast, him telling the pervert simply to go to hell before killing him was exactly what Sasuke would say.) Sasuke's huge outburst with the fangirl was also way too verbose from him (and bordering on cutsey with the name calling and praise for Naruto). It was good that the story tried to provide an explanation for that because he was tired and frustrated, but it still went a bit overboard for what Sasuke would actually do/say, in my opinion, since he rarely speaks more than a sentence or two and almost never acknowledges a fangirl, no matter how annoying she's being. (He's a character who almost never loses his cool.)

As I said, I do like this story, but there are moments when the characters stop being "Naruto" and "Sasuke" to me and more obviously feel like characters in a fanfiction.

This story is hilarious and very creative. Female frustrated Sasuke makes me smile when ever I read of his trials. In this chapter his outburst to the fangirls makes me wish he could communicate that clearly all the time. Maybe if he damages (physically or emotionally) a stalker or two they'd leave him alone. The sexual tension between Naruto and Sasuke is just perfect. I imagine that it is going to be revealed exactly who almost got molested by the pervert and Naruto's explosion will be epic.

Neji loose some body parts also seems likely. Trading one type of stalker for another is going to make Sasuke want to tear out his hair and Neji's balls by the root. =)

Whatever does happen (I just like making perdictions really about my favorite stories) I'm sure I'll enjoy them heartily.

However there was one thing that really bugged me. A small problem I figure is due to spell checker. You used "assignation" quite a bit when talking about Naruto joining the ANBU. To quote Princess Bride, "I don't think that word means what you think it means." "assignation" means an arranged meeting... it can mean a meeting for sex, which is what I thought you were talking about at first considering the general theme of the fic. However I think you actually meant "assassination"- to kill someone. Like I said probably spell checker, or a Freudian slip. Still I would appreciate it if you fix it.