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by Telpei

schedule February 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
My favorite part was when Naruto was the only one who noticed that Sasuke wasn't bound. Brilliant writing. Stupid council. And excellent story. Can't wait for more.
schedule February 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story. I love this chapter. I think it's cool the way you portray Naruto as an excellent ninja, instead of an idiot. Can't wait for more.
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schedule February 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love Naruto in this. Despite his impatience and brash attitude, he's still a competent overall cautious shinobi. I like how he's testing Sasuke's limits and securing his domain before he allows Sasuke any liberties. He takes his responsibilities seriously and if Sasuke had any allusions to obeying the council (which I doubt), he would find himself in having a hard time to do so.

Great job on the fic. Looking forward to chapter 3. ^^
person leanne
schedule December 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh that bastard! but then what else could he had said uner the circumstancesm, but still... Good beginning, though I don't really think the council has the full authority to send the Hokage away, but I don't really know.

Any way this will be really interesting to read.
schedule December 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god, that rat bastard. Although, I detect a subplot there. I wonder...hmmmm. Please update soon so I can see if my suspicions are correct!!! :-) Great job!
schedule December 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awesome beginning. I can't wait for more. I'm interested to see where you take it.
schedule December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Woooo... Interesting plot. I definitely haven't come across another quite like this. I'm most intrigued. Carry on. Carry on. You're off to a good start. ^.^
schedule December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ahhhhhh! Bad Sasuke, Bad! Poor Naru-chan!

This story sounds interesting can't wait to read more.
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person BennyPeace
schedule December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh. my. god.

what a predicament.
person Kimra
schedule December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
:D More more more. :D