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December 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is a really well done story. Aside from some much needed punctuation (commas, commas, commas!), I really felt for Naruto in this. His well planned and crafted attacks against Sasuke were fantastic. Kitsune are the ultimate seductresses and Naruto instinctually picks up on this skill and utilizes it for all its worth. Sasuke's startled reactions to Naruto's competence as a Ninja were also nice touches. Overall, this story was great. Now, on to some suggestions...
If you want to find a starting place for Sasuke to begin trying to reconnect with Naruto, how about soon after she gives birth to their kid. Officially, Sasuke's done what he needed to do in the way of repopulating his clan. Sakura, off of active Ninja duty to take care of their child, is stuck at home and Sasuke has more time to sneak way (mission and what not - wink wink). Sasuke could have also have been noticing Naruto keeping a watchful eye on Sasuke's behavior towards Sakura, all the while keeping his distance. Now that the baby's been born and Sasuke's proven to have lived up to his agreement to take care or his 'wife,' Naruto starts to back off. This immediately bothers Sasuke, because although they are no longer "friends", at least the blond was near. Sasuke decides to make his move and starts trying to pester Tsunande to pair him up with Naruto again on missions. Of course, the Hokage looks upon the Uchiha now with disgust and in no way wants to grant any request he makes. Another thing Sasuke decides to do is start shadowing the blond and showing up in all his favorite haunts - the ramen shop, the training grounds, near the blond's new apartment - everywhere. This is also driving Naruto crazy as he is actively trying to avoid Sasuke, only to see him every where he goes. Finally the two do get paired up on a mission and will have to work together...
I dunno, feel free to take any of those ideas and run with it. After reading the first chapter, I have no doubts that whatever you come up with next will be just as good. Keep up the good work! I look forward to the next installment. ^^ (Oh, and one request! I want more Sexy no jutsu'd Naruto/Sasuke scenes! It would be a great way for Naruto to torture him and makes things awkward between them afterwards when spending too much time in that form -which I firmly believe makes him actually female- backfires on him leading him to experience his own aroused reactions. What a way to get the ball in motion! Rewr!)
If you want to find a starting place for Sasuke to begin trying to reconnect with Naruto, how about soon after she gives birth to their kid. Officially, Sasuke's done what he needed to do in the way of repopulating his clan. Sakura, off of active Ninja duty to take care of their child, is stuck at home and Sasuke has more time to sneak way (mission and what not - wink wink). Sasuke could have also have been noticing Naruto keeping a watchful eye on Sasuke's behavior towards Sakura, all the while keeping his distance. Now that the baby's been born and Sasuke's proven to have lived up to his agreement to take care or his 'wife,' Naruto starts to back off. This immediately bothers Sasuke, because although they are no longer "friends", at least the blond was near. Sasuke decides to make his move and starts trying to pester Tsunande to pair him up with Naruto again on missions. Of course, the Hokage looks upon the Uchiha now with disgust and in no way wants to grant any request he makes. Another thing Sasuke decides to do is start shadowing the blond and showing up in all his favorite haunts - the ramen shop, the training grounds, near the blond's new apartment - everywhere. This is also driving Naruto crazy as he is actively trying to avoid Sasuke, only to see him every where he goes. Finally the two do get paired up on a mission and will have to work together...
I dunno, feel free to take any of those ideas and run with it. After reading the first chapter, I have no doubts that whatever you come up with next will be just as good. Keep up the good work! I look forward to the next installment. ^^ (Oh, and one request! I want more Sexy no jutsu'd Naruto/Sasuke scenes! It would be a great way for Naruto to torture him and makes things awkward between them afterwards when spending too much time in that form -which I firmly believe makes him actually female- backfires on him leading him to experience his own aroused reactions. What a way to get the ball in motion! Rewr!)