schedule
May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
I can see Sasuke smoking an occasional cigarette. . . . I like the way this is progressing. You write really well. . . . Oh hey, and Naruto’s Hokage! =D . . . . Nope, can’t blame him for trying. . . . Naruto’s “The Sex God of Konoha?” Awright, cool, dude. (Naruto’s probably hating the ashy taste, though.) . . . . Boy, this progressed fast! O_O; . . . . (*shiver*shiver*) Love the description of the times to use the surnames. Love those words. . . . Oh Gawd, “hubby?” (*choke*gack*)
Wow, that was . . . s-s-short. o_o; I think I prefer it to take a while to build up, even during hot/wild/raw/“animal” sex. But the writing was done really well.
And I don’t think the title was lame. I like one-word titles. =)
I can see Sasuke smoking an occasional cigarette. . . . I like the way this is progressing. You write really well. . . . Oh hey, and Naruto’s Hokage! =D . . . . Nope, can’t blame him for trying. . . . Naruto’s “The Sex God of Konoha?” Awright, cool, dude. (Naruto’s probably hating the ashy taste, though.) . . . . Boy, this progressed fast! O_O; . . . . (*shiver*shiver*) Love the description of the times to use the surnames. Love those words. . . . Oh Gawd, “hubby?” (*choke*gack*)
Wow, that was . . . s-s-short. o_o; I think I prefer it to take a while to build up, even during hot/wild/raw/“animal” sex. But the writing was done really well.
And I don’t think the title was lame. I like one-word titles. =)
schedule
January 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very funny and cute.
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