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This review is about your spelling of Naruto's last name. You spell Uzumaki Uzamaki. I'm not sure if it's a typo, a purposeful change, or you just think his name is spelled that way, but the correct spelling is Uzumaki.

Hi sho-chan. Love the update. But I am wondering about a few things. One why does the guys and girls fight there own gender then fight who is the winner. Or something like that. Gaara is different but he is still a strong shinobi. I hope that the Hyuuga heir Hanzori will be an ally instead of an enemy. Hope to see your updates soon.
Josh

I don't trust this new guy, he's bound to be trouble!!!

this is way, way better than my first fanfic. i love it.

I liked this chapter. I think this story has come a long way from the original chapters. I can't wait to read more.
Rox

I've been closely following your story for quite a while now, and I felt I wouldn't review until you were actually done with the story, but after 50+ chapters, I thought, meh! What the hell. You're doing a good job. I like stories that are not only focused on sex, sex, sex, sex! I mean, yes, considering the website where you're posting your story, that is only logical, right? But the fact that you went out of your way to have a plot is admirable. I think this is my first time getting in touch with you, but thanks to you, I was finally able to find the Naruto page on AFF.net, and for that, I am eternally grateful to you! You must be asking yourself how? Well, you reviewed my Full Metal Panic! story "Kimi ga Hoshii," and since I'm the nosy type, I went ahead and checked out your page. There I found that you were in the process of writing a Naruto story, and seriously... lol... I could almost hear an angel choir singing in the background with a heavenly light shining down upon me! lol... I'm kidding, it wasn't THAT dramatic, but hey! Can't say I didn't try! So, yeah... I always wondered why the anime list in AFF.net never had Naruto in it, but then I noticed that it's a completely different page. And yeah... since FMP doesn't have as much stories as I would personally like, I had to read other fandoms.

Moving on....

I have enjoyed reading your story very much. I have to admit I am not too fond of the idea of Hinata being a masochist, considering her personality, but the way you write it, it's bearable... it's so bad to the point it disgusts me or anything. I guess I've always had this idea of Hinata being just as gentle in bed as she is in real life, and that she wouldn't put up with any kind of abuse, regardless of who it's coming from. But... I guess I should know better... lol... her Naruto-kun is the exception of her life!

I'm also not very fond of tentacles--I think you wrote a chapter with that--Chapter 50 or 49... can't remember it off the top of my head. I was glad that scene was short and sweet, to be honest. But who knows... maybe Hinata really likes it rough... hmm... it's the quiet ones you have to worry about, right? lol...

But hey, this is only my review of your story. Honesty is the best policy. Furthermore, keep in mind that if I really didn't like your story, I wouldn't have reviewed! ;-) Writers need to be prepared to not only receive positive reviews, but negative, and neutral and constructive reviews. And it's really nothing personal. If you take everything everyone says personally, then that'll really be the end of you. What people say about you, or what you do won't make you less or more of a person. That decision is entirely up to you. And yes... I know that when people say good stuff about you, it's a great feeling... I'd be lying if I were to deny it, but I always look at the bright side of things, be it good or bad.

Also, I'll let you in on a little secret... though I really don't like the masochist aspects of your story, I come to AFF.net everyday to check on your story, so that should definitely tell you something. Curse AFF.net for not having story/author alerts! Hmm... what else...? Oh, yes! Don't worry about updating in a rush. A lot of people like your story, and I seriously think they like it enough that they are willing to wait as long as it takes for you to update. And an advice from a writer to another writer... don't rush... things that are done in a rush never come out as good as they would, had you taken the proper amount of time. The people who DEMAND for you to update right away are just selfish. They never take into consideration what circumstances you might come across, such as your computer breaking down. Writing fanfiction is a labor of love; you are doing it for free. It's not like they bought a freaking book, so they need to suck it up and wait!

Hmm... I think that's it for now... I know I'm talking your ear off--well, that doesn't make any sense considering I'm actually writing, but you know what I mean! In the mean time, take your time, know that there are a lot of people that enjoy your story, and that in particular I am looking forward to see what else you have up your sleeves.

Take care, and till next time. Expect a review from me once you are officially done with your story.

Perpetual

Well, Hiashi is a real bastard, I didn't think he'd go that far. But since when are Hinata and Neji's eyes blue? I can't wait to see Hinata finish of Hiashi.

And if Hinata really does like the idea of tentacles having their way with her I suggest Naruto uses fox tails to pleasure her.

NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!! Super cliffie. You are evil sho-chan..... but i still love ya. Can't wait for more and keep up the excellent work. What are you doing for a job later? I could easily see you as a writer.... *e-huggle*

That was really good. I can't wait to read more.
Rox

you are the first writer to keep me checking every morning and every night to see if there is a new chapter for so many chapter! quite addicting and well written!