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May 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
WOW! My friend sent me this story, and after the first chapter I was hooked. So please update soon, for this story is just plain amazing!!!
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April 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oh mi gosh
this is soooo good
i really hope kakashi isn't really mad at her that his lover for her makes him not care or there was a way that sakura could remember what he did whit the needle wow why do things have to be sad !!!!
update sooon please
this is soooo good
i really hope kakashi isn't really mad at her that his lover for her makes him not care or there was a way that sakura could remember what he did whit the needle wow why do things have to be sad !!!!
update sooon please
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April 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
WOW i love it sooo much wow
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April 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Um...ok...seven words...UPDATE AS FAST AS YOU POSSIBLY CAN!!! This story is absolutely amazing! Seriously one of the best fanfictions I've ever read! I personally like the darker turn of the story and can't wait to see what happens next! ^_^
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April 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I wonder how they are going to find out anything when she is drugged and some what hypnotized. Ugh that just leaves the entire thing back to square one, damn you kakashi for not eavesdropping a little longer to hear him give her commands. Oh well, now we know dejaku wants to off kakashi, he could very well be in on this entire thing as well.
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March 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
What in the world happened to them getting checked on by the village?
I respect your choice in making this plot more developed, and less fluffy.
Hope you update soon!
Tawnya
I respect your choice in making this plot more developed, and less fluffy.
Hope you update soon!
Tawnya
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March 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Kudos to you for sticking to the storyline *you* want to write- that's an admirable decision. Don't let anyone talk you out of it. Dark does not mean bad, by any stretch of the imagination- no one ever said this sort of assignment was easy or squeaky clean. I'm awaiting the next installment with the proverbial bated breath.
Besides, I have a feeling it will all work out in the end :)
Besides, I have a feeling it will all work out in the end :)
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March 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Rest assured, you havent lost this reader because of Ch.19! I'm in for the ride, 'cuz I believe the pain your putting them through will be worth it.
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March 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Just wanted to let you know chapter 19 was fantastic! I support the direction you're taking this, don't let anyone whine about losing the mushy, lovey stuff...I'm glad you chose to show the grittier side of this sort of work. Great job making the Sakura/Yellow encounter very believable without turning it into an emo-fest. Excited to read more!
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March 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I think this chapter is...well, saying "good" doesn't seem quite right. Heh. But it does fit the plot and it is well done. :) I don't usually nitpick things, but because your stories are usually so well written and edited I thought I'd point out the 2 things I caught, for fixing. (15 page papers fry the brain. I'm amazed at your ability to write this as well!)
"Sakura’s head was spinning and she found she could barely breathe as she was filled over and over again by her enemies throbbing cock." should be "enemy's"
Also, it looks like something got cut off in transferring/uploading/whatever the file, here: " How could she face him with nothing to show for having to sleep with their target? She was so ashamed of "
As usual, I eagerly await the next installment. :)
"Sakura’s head was spinning and she found she could barely breathe as she was filled over and over again by her enemies throbbing cock." should be "enemy's"
Also, it looks like something got cut off in transferring/uploading/whatever the file, here: " How could she face him with nothing to show for having to sleep with their target? She was so ashamed of "
As usual, I eagerly await the next installment. :)