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March 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I knew it was going to happen eventually. I will continue to enjoy the story, no matter which direction you take it in. Hopefully you don't lose fans, because it really is a great fic.
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March 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i think this new chapter is really fantastic! please update often. this is one of my favorite stories.
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March 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
epic chapter, very interesting, good piece with tsuneri, guess she is a partner of the yellow eye guy
i look forward to the next chapter
i look forward to the next chapter
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March 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It's an interesting direction that you took the story. The only problem I had with it is that I don't think you needed to describe all the gritty details of the quite extensive bedroom scenes. I wasn't really all that offended by it, but I found myself skimming/skipping parts of it because it kept dragging on. Sometimes just hinting at what happened is enough. Believe it or not, I'm actually pretty interested in the plot at this point and I was hoping the story would progress more.
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March 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
very good chapter.
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March 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I rate a story based on three things: Character developement, plot, and ability for the story to evoke emotions. You have done all three. You've taken us (the readers) from nervous, to happy, to lusty, to HAWT, to anger, to fear, and now you have brought hatred to the mix. I clap to you as a writer.
As a reader, however, I want there to be a happy ending or at least closure. Hence why this last chapter brought out the hatred emotion. I want Yellow to die a painful and horrible death at the hands of the women he's tortured. My heart physically hurts for Kakashi and i can only hope and wait that things will turn out for the better. I eagerly await your next chapter.
~L
As a reader, however, I want there to be a happy ending or at least closure. Hence why this last chapter brought out the hatred emotion. I want Yellow to die a painful and horrible death at the hands of the women he's tortured. My heart physically hurts for Kakashi and i can only hope and wait that things will turn out for the better. I eagerly await your next chapter.
~L
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March 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Damn....
It's as if he has a leash on the nervous system.
It's as if he has a leash on the nervous system.
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March 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
daaaamn, that was intense.
Regardless of the fact that she was used like a slave, the sex was interesting. There wasnt any bondage, or abuse, or sick stuff in there. Thats good, I cant stand stuff like that. I wouldnt doubt that if you had put twisted abuse or anything of the sort in there that you would have lost many reviewers.
I feel so damned bad for her at the end when he leaves and she doesnt realize that hes drugged her or anything. Gosh, it was intense. And that Kakashi had no idea that all of this was done against her will! You wont lose my attention on this story though, Im curious as to how you are going to write the next chapter. I like the way you wrote it, it was realistic, and intense, but not in a way that was disgusting and screwed up if you get what I mean. Some people write stories about sex slaves and bondage, but really twist it in such a way that its just horrifying and disgusting. Some people just write such sick things that you just wonder "what in the hell was his person thinking writing something like that!" You didnt, you just put plain sex in there.
So keep up the good work and I hope to see another update soon!
Regardless of the fact that she was used like a slave, the sex was interesting. There wasnt any bondage, or abuse, or sick stuff in there. Thats good, I cant stand stuff like that. I wouldnt doubt that if you had put twisted abuse or anything of the sort in there that you would have lost many reviewers.
I feel so damned bad for her at the end when he leaves and she doesnt realize that hes drugged her or anything. Gosh, it was intense. And that Kakashi had no idea that all of this was done against her will! You wont lose my attention on this story though, Im curious as to how you are going to write the next chapter. I like the way you wrote it, it was realistic, and intense, but not in a way that was disgusting and screwed up if you get what I mean. Some people write stories about sex slaves and bondage, but really twist it in such a way that its just horrifying and disgusting. Some people just write such sick things that you just wonder "what in the hell was his person thinking writing something like that!" You didnt, you just put plain sex in there.
So keep up the good work and I hope to see another update soon!
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March 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I totally agree with the direction of this story! I've always seen this story as something a little darker than traditional fluff. That chapter was really well written and the plot wasn't confusing at all like some stories. I liked the little hint about Tsurenai's mission; can't wait to find out more about that! GREAT JOB!!!! Keep writing and please update soon!
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March 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I can't tell how much I've waited this chapter. And I love it although it was disturbing. Im worrying because Kakashi has a soft spot in my heart, I just need to see him happy! He isnt happy now, then maybe later? Please? Pretty please? Maybe after he rip the yellow eyed man to pieces? I love this story, cant stop reading if I wanted to. So continue quickly please. You are great!