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Wild Car Hebi eh? I like that.

YAY~! HEBI FIC~! Not enough Hebi fic in the world. I love this so much.

...canibeyourslavepleaseXD?

another great chapter. when i thought on how you was potraying sasuke as rash and immature is in actuality the way he is (canon) on the inside even though kis---(bad speller) would never put it out there like that i believe that the hints are there if you look for it (avid rereader) and you have it right on the money. the way he ran to oochimaru and how he keeps following his big brother around for vengence just proves it, but it wasn't until i aw your story that i realized thanks for that. my one quick question is how did sakura not see sasuke save naruto, where was she at. if she is a ninja why would she turn away from the enemy. since she say naruto when he transformed shouldn't she be used to seeing it. why is sasuke so fearful of being caught by kakshi, isn't he techinally strronger than him. i can't wait to see the next chapter.

I wouldnt worry to much about the sensies not telling Naruto about Sasuke and trying to rewrite that bit for a couple reasons. One, people misread things all the time. If you didnt intend for them to see Sasuke, but Naruto knows he was there. It would be natural for Naruto to mistrust them after they withheld information from him and assume they are withholding information about Sasuke. Two, if your intention is to have Naruto disillusioned because he feels that he really hasnt made any progress with the people he thought truly cared for him, and that all they can see is a demon vessel, then having them come off a little cold would reinforce his decision to leave. I guess what I am saying is that it works.
Halskr

when i saw the short chapter i thought it was a mistake so i didn't read it at first i apolijize i did not realize that it was done on purpose. i get the feeling that sasuke is going to abandon his mission to confront his brother for a while to go looking for naruto. is sasuke going to turn up at the confrontation between at---and jiraiya looking for naruto and he not be there or is sasuke going to meeet up with naruto first then the other konoha ninjas. i wonder who the guy is that is supposed to be jiraiya's friend (is he really a friend). i can't wait to see the next update.

Awesome chapter(s). I first one kind of faked me out. I was like, 'wow that was very summarized' but I got the point so it was good. I wonder what Sasuke's new plans are. I hope his team still follows him.
Naruto was lucky to run into a friend of ero-sennin. I wonder what the message is? I guess I'll find out later.
Great as usual. Can't wait for more.
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And today's lesson little Naruto shall be about a little thing called 'stranger danger'.

Excellent several chapters that I haven't been able to review.
For some reason this last one with Sakura really rubbed me wrong... I wanted to hit her when she said 'don't leave me too'. It felt like she was laying on unnecessary guilt... So manipulative and selfish. As if Naruto's hopes, dreams and feelings held no weight.
However... I am having one of 'those' days were maybe my personal attitude toward 'users' is affecting my judgement.
As always, you know I love this story. :)

i read all 17 chapters of your story and i have to say that i like your outlook of the characters and what they are going through. i was kind of surprised when sakura let naruto go with out any fuss or without him haing to knock her out like sasuke since she keeps saying that she doesn't want to lose him as well why did she let him go. also why didn't kyuubi mention that it was sasuke who saved him but only mneetioned that he was there does kyuubi lose all sense of himself when naruto gets more tails. is kakshi and the others keeping the secret about sasuke so that naruto won't go after him (which is tacky because he saved him). i can't wait to see the next chapter.

There is a thing called cruel and unusual punishment and this stellar little blurb of a chapter is the definition of the phrase... To leave us like that. WHY? WHY? WHY?
Sasuke makes an unimaginable announcement... your beautifully written Team Hebi have his back and then... 'click here to review'.
So mean... so very, very mean.
That said... can't wait for the next.