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April 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*throws back her citrus....ahhhh, so refreshing, but it didn't cool me down a bit!* Lovely. Gaara is my hero for this line, “Would you like to hear what is ‘fated’ for you later today?” LULZ. And of course, our brotherly love interactions are priceless.
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ahhhhh!!!! so good I had to read it twice!!!!! LOOOOOOVE it. Thanks soo much. Can't wait for the next one!!! This is my favorite fic out right now!!! luv ya your slave
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
YAY!!! I absolutely LOVED this chapter!!!! SasuNaru... yum!
So good. The text messages between Itachi and Sasuke were funny as hell.
*gives 100 cookies* Enjoy!
update!
So good. The text messages between Itachi and Sasuke were funny as hell.
*gives 100 cookies* Enjoy!
update!
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That lemon had me impersonating Iruka in episode 1 when Naruto pulled the Sexy Jutsu. And I laughed my ass off at the Text Messages. Ibiki's line about law abiding citizens etc. etc. was brilliant! Oh this chapter was just a barrel of smexy fun mixed with a slight worry. I have a nasty feeling that Orochi-slime is gonna make one more appearance, hopefully he'll die in a horrible way this time like falling into a vat of acid or being crushed by part of a falling building. Itachi as always is a hoot, you write him in all his Dark Lord-ness so very well.
Excellent chapter, I'll be waiting for the next with blinding anticipation. Oh and you deserve cookies for that lemon (sends you cookies and chocolate and dragon snacks for Fluffy)
Excellent chapter, I'll be waiting for the next with blinding anticipation. Oh and you deserve cookies for that lemon (sends you cookies and chocolate and dragon snacks for Fluffy)
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful, funny, perfect and breath-taking. All of these describe this chapter.
I was so happy when everybody was reunited, and I absolutely cracked up at the line, "The scarred man smirked before looking at the occupants in the bed, “Hello, law abiding citizens,” his gaze shifted to the three Uchihas, “Marginally law abiding citizens,” and then his eyes fell on Kisame, “… citizen.”"
I literally had to go back three times and read it again. Hilarious.
And the way Sasuke was so possessive over his name being on Naruto's back made me positively giddy. Lastly, the long-awaited smut was simply perfectl. So well done. All the emotions, descriptions, and dialogue fit the scene wonderfully. And you definitely did not dissapoint in the sexyness factor.
I loved it. Please update soon!
I was so happy when everybody was reunited, and I absolutely cracked up at the line, "The scarred man smirked before looking at the occupants in the bed, “Hello, law abiding citizens,” his gaze shifted to the three Uchihas, “Marginally law abiding citizens,” and then his eyes fell on Kisame, “… citizen.”"
I literally had to go back three times and read it again. Hilarious.
And the way Sasuke was so possessive over his name being on Naruto's back made me positively giddy. Lastly, the long-awaited smut was simply perfectl. So well done. All the emotions, descriptions, and dialogue fit the scene wonderfully. And you definitely did not dissapoint in the sexyness factor.
I loved it. Please update soon!
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!! whew! that was so flippin' hilarious! itachi needs to be slapped, HARD!!! taking pictures, sending employees over at inappropriate moments, texting? it was just too much, and the lemonade made me pucker before it really hit the glass (you KNOW what I mean!).
sigh, what a way to start a week. honestly, if you'll give me po box address and a promise to send me an autographed, spiral-bound copy, there $100K in Monopoly money on its way to you. ;-)
you so rock! can't wait to read the final chapters. oh, and please let orochi get assassinated or something (he didn't pay pein's fee!) for real this time.
sigh, what a way to start a week. honestly, if you'll give me po box address and a promise to send me an autographed, spiral-bound copy, there $100K in Monopoly money on its way to you. ;-)
you so rock! can't wait to read the final chapters. oh, and please let orochi get assassinated or something (he didn't pay pein's fee!) for real this time.
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
As usual, I loved the chapter!
I loved your little disclaimer at the beginning about the lemonade. :-) Made me giggle. Actually, it came out more like a delightfully, wicked cackle, but giggle sounds so much nicer!
This part made me cack---er---giggle again: “Dobe,” Sasuke said grateful that his voice sounded normal, “I can see your ass.”
I don't quite know what to make of the laughing sound that came out of my mouth with this: "You goddamn, son of a bitch, asshole. Die. Die. Die." Followed up by: "P.S. I am telling mother you called her a bitch."
I did notice an error in your story, one I've made before that people have corrected me on. I felt the need to let you know that this is not correct: "Naruto arched violently when the bundle of nerves deep in his body was brushed." It's not a bundle of nerves. It's the prostrate which means it's a gland, not a bundle of nerves. Common fandom error.
Loved, loved, loved the sex scene! Beautifully written. Looking forward to the last chapter and epilogue! :-) ~ Jelp
I loved your little disclaimer at the beginning about the lemonade. :-) Made me giggle. Actually, it came out more like a delightfully, wicked cackle, but giggle sounds so much nicer!
This part made me cack---er---giggle again: “Dobe,” Sasuke said grateful that his voice sounded normal, “I can see your ass.”
I don't quite know what to make of the laughing sound that came out of my mouth with this: "You goddamn, son of a bitch, asshole. Die. Die. Die." Followed up by: "P.S. I am telling mother you called her a bitch."
I did notice an error in your story, one I've made before that people have corrected me on. I felt the need to let you know that this is not correct: "Naruto arched violently when the bundle of nerves deep in his body was brushed." It's not a bundle of nerves. It's the prostrate which means it's a gland, not a bundle of nerves. Common fandom error.
Loved, loved, loved the sex scene! Beautifully written. Looking forward to the last chapter and epilogue! :-) ~ Jelp
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aww they said 'I Love You' YES! *fangirl squeal* I teared up then...and several times
throughout the chapter...but i usually do that when i read your story...it just brings
out my emotions :)
Haha, i loved Itachi and his deviousness...bringing Naruto one of Sasuke's jerseys with the
big UCHIHA across the back..sending the duckies over when he knew it would be interrupting 'something'.
But my favorite Itachi moment was when he stood in the doorway of Naruto's hospital room
observing his brother and Naruto laying cuddled together...aww! That was so damn sweet.
The part that made me laugh the most was when Sasuke told Naruto he could see his ass LOL.
And when Ibiki referred to Naruto,Kakashi and Iruka as 'law abiding citizens', then the Uchiha's
as 'Marginally law abiding citizens' and then Kisame as just...'citizen' :D
When Fugaku told both of his sons he was proud of them...more tears. That was so
awesome...and when he said 'Welcome to the fold, son' to Naruto as Sasuke traced the UCHIHA
lettering on his back...well that made me laugh and grin and the tears went away. :D
And the lemon was well worth waiting for. It was hot, sexy, and beautiful all rolled up
into one. I swear every time they say I love you to each other i want to just melt *sigh*
throughout the chapter...but i usually do that when i read your story...it just brings
out my emotions :)
Haha, i loved Itachi and his deviousness...bringing Naruto one of Sasuke's jerseys with the
big UCHIHA across the back..sending the duckies over when he knew it would be interrupting 'something'.
But my favorite Itachi moment was when he stood in the doorway of Naruto's hospital room
observing his brother and Naruto laying cuddled together...aww! That was so damn sweet.
The part that made me laugh the most was when Sasuke told Naruto he could see his ass LOL.
And when Ibiki referred to Naruto,Kakashi and Iruka as 'law abiding citizens', then the Uchiha's
as 'Marginally law abiding citizens' and then Kisame as just...'citizen' :D
When Fugaku told both of his sons he was proud of them...more tears. That was so
awesome...and when he said 'Welcome to the fold, son' to Naruto as Sasuke traced the UCHIHA
lettering on his back...well that made me laugh and grin and the tears went away. :D
And the lemon was well worth waiting for. It was hot, sexy, and beautiful all rolled up
into one. I swear every time they say I love you to each other i want to just melt *sigh*
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awweee! That was sooo sweet and hot! I loved the 'Hurry duckies ...hurry.' part so funny. I laughed so hard at the text messages. I love this story. I can't wait for more.
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the update. The best part of it is the interaction between Naruto/Sasuke and Itachi. This is just priceless.