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by lexjamandme

person Pundit
schedule January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is brillaint. I've laughed out loud about 5 times per chapter (I'm not even going to try to count how many times I smiled). I LOVE your use of Gai in this fic. It's absolutely inspired. Also, I'm very curious as to who is getting it on over Sasuke's emails. Neji? Itachi? I honestly don't know. Can't wait to read more! Thanks for posting.
schedule January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
cant wait tell the next ch
person Anon
schedule January 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the update.
I like how you added some flashbacks about the family.
I can just imagine how traumatizing it is to have Gai as a babysitter.
schedule January 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
read this yesterday but at the end i was so 'nnoooooo need more story! rrraaarrr!' i decided not to review and annoy you lol Ready to give a more sensible review now.

LOVED naruto's interaction with his 'parents' papa and sunshine aww too cute

Iruka and kakashi's back story and how ruka was insulted when kak said he should leave him... so SWEEETTTT

aahhhmmmm oh! 'the littlest uchiha' that gave me a few good chuckles

the emails.. HA! esp sasuke's to itachi, short and way to the point lol

theeeennn a little bit of inter office interaction hhmmm who shall it be?? my guess? ah, gaaraneji?? i don't know , random guess as 1 seemed kind of talkative more like kiba... y dont i jus wait an see lol

Finally the sasuke passing naru bc he didnt want to drive like a granny LMAO too funny, and everything behold that was total win

Wont bore u anymore, u wrote the story u know what's in it lol
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter
schedule January 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this story wins at life. i think you are my new favorite writer. i also have no clue how i managed to miss this. twice! but, i'm happy i've found it now. i think it's going to be funny and really cute. i love love love how you write those two.
person Halskr
schedule January 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I laughed so hard when I read this story. The part about the emails in chapter 2 was incredible funny. This story is fun to read. Thanks for sharing.
Halskr
schedule January 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
update! smooches! haven't read it yet but its almost 4 here so i know i'll be hella tired after i read it and will have no internet access for a week soooo review ya then! :D
person digiditz
schedule January 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This story cannot unravel fast enough. I feel very sorry for young Naruto. A sick child should not be exposed to Gai-sensei. Don't get me wrong, I think Gai is awesome, but I know that if I came in contact with him on a day i didn't feel well I'd probably kick his ass.
person Vox
schedule January 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I love you, I love you, I love you! I wake up after a hellish night to discover my absolute most favorite story in the world updated and begging me to read it. I actually woke my brother up, I was laughing so hard.

I love the story. I love bastard-Sasuke, and the way you made him childish and petty. I love mature Naruto, but then, I love baka-Naruto, too. I'm really interested to see where this is going, and, as is now typical, I am armed with a pitchfork and torch and awaiting the next chapter... eagerly.
person Jelp
schedule January 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awww, poor traumatized Naruto. I hope Gai kinda realizes what's going on, and he helps get them get together to make up for scarring Naruto's childhood memories. But still, I loved how Sasuke was immediately defensive of Naruto when asked why Naruto was also VP. "Because he's the best." GREAT line. :-) So cute, and it made Sasuke think. I think it's very in-character because Sasuke would say something like that in the manga. I think he would say to Naruto that he's a loser, but praise him to others.

I feel so bad for both boys. Sasuke's a prick, but I still love him. :-) And I'm guessing there's a side thing going on with Neji (since he got the e-mail) and, hmm Gaara? It's usually Neji and Gaara, but I wouldn't be surprised if you made a different pairing. Keep up the good work. Update again soon! ~ Jelp