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January 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this was ok, i just would've liked to have a naruto/temari scene, u could easily have a continuation for the rest of this exam, even before the second part ends. I'm just partial for nar/tem and would like to see a good scene with them. Pretty good.
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January 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this is great please update soon
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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
haha.. this was highly entertaining. =^^= The plot was about as deep and believable as a porno, but it was really fun to read and now I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
Naruto gets lost and gets it on with every kunoichi he comes across. Kick ass. :D
Naruto gets lost and gets it on with every kunoichi he comes across. Kick ass. :D
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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad start, hope to see more soon. I second the motion of adding Yugito Nii (however you spell her name). I know this may sound strange but have Kin be the alpha female (she's a bad girl and bad girls love to be dominate) and don't kill her if you include the invasion part. Finally have some sasuke bashing. Hope you update soon.
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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
for a first story of this kind this was actually pretty good, you got decent reasoning with why it happened, good descriptions and actions. You got great spelling which is a plus and you got some plot in there as well so over all this is a very good start and I can't wait to see who the other girls will be and what happens next as well. Plus I have to wonder if there will be any changes to the history with this happening too.
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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love the Bi temari, howz about Naruto meets Ino?
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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE DAMN IT
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January 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
LOVE IT UPDATE SOON OR ELSE
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January 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i loved the first chapter. i can tell this is going to be an awesome story. can't wait for the next chapter.
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January 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
a little fast , but none the less interesting. cant wait to see who naruto gets next.