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for Pretend for me

by sakuyalove

person ifXY
schedule May 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i usually don't do much narusasu but hell! this was good i have to admit it
i like the way u captured their character! Sasuke is a bloody dumbass v all know dat >.>
person blur
schedule September 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Must have a sequel!!!
person harus
schedule April 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Extremely hot and it ended on a really sweet note.
person Art
schedule March 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This story is so good. A sequel would be great.
schedule February 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I like your story. Hope you got more ideas.

P.s.:if you haven't found me, my author name is darkblood. I'm sorry if you could not find me. So, hope you can forgive me.^_^
schedule February 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Now thatwas the hottest thing in the world.

You rule!! XD
person a kitsunes light
schedule February 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really LOVED IT!! this got my mood a bit up, I was really sad just now.
Anyway, it would have been interested if they were to meet again, but maybe that's too much, dont know... anyway It was awesome!
person Anon
schedule February 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)

Love the very second line of the story. . . . I also love the line, “But of all the unexpected things he had done [. . .]” ^^ . . . Ahhh, so Sasuke really misses Naruto, eh? . . . Interesting character. I liked his answer to Sasuke’s question about why he’s a prostitute. “Parents died, huh?” I guess that shouldn’t be surprising in ninja countries, but it’s kind of a funny coincidence all the same. Hmmm. . . . That was funny. “Pedophile?” X) Oh, Sasuke took the picture with him when he defected after all. Cute. . . . I wonder what this guy’s voice might sound like when he’s transformed. He never knew Naruto (maybe). . . . Uh, you never really gave a description about how good the transformation was. . . . Interesting prostitute; are they allowed to be so assertive? (I wouldn’t know, I’ve never been around any.) Love the part where Sasuke freezes. . . . Is a tongue an organ? ô_o . . . Love it when he calls Sasuke “baby.” . . . I wonder how well someone can keep a Henge going while they’re having sex. . . . Ah~!!! I caught that! Sasuke never told this guy his name, did he! :D . . . . Aww man, he left? That’s sad. :( . . . Awesome ending. I really liked it. I don’t know if you should put a sequel or not; this is the kind of thing I wouldn’t be frustrated with if it was left in the open. This is the perfect material for letting the reader decide what happens next (it’s harder than one would think to make an ending like that).

I also like your original idea. You should post that, too, as a separate fic. I’d enjoy reading it. It would be from Naruto’s POV, though, right? I’d also like to see how well Sasuke tops (if ever; according to this fic, he’s usually topped before).
person Raina
schedule February 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow this was truly excellent. It was sweet, hot, smexy, and hot. I like how in control Naruto was, that just made it extra sexy. I loved it.
schedule February 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love this, especially the little twist at the end.