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Dragonwolf I think your doing a fine job writing in english inspite of a very few mispellings such as a simple one is "putted" actually this is incorrect what you want to spell is "Put away, or he put down the scroll." Put is simply put. Um hopefully this was a little helpful and not damaging to your writing. I like your story idea and want to see where it's all going. ^-^

Hey, good start to a fic. You do a wonderful job, especially for someone who doesn't have English as a first language. Unfortunately, even though the plot device is believable, Naruto being the way he is makes it hard for me to enjoy the story. Sasuke is pretty in character, though I think he might be more annoyed and irritated, at least at Sakura. Keep up the writing!

Oh, and thanks for your review! It made me smile! *HOBBIT! LOL*

i really like the start of this fiction. I hope u update soon, and i also hope that everything turns out to be alright with them (NaruSasuSaku).

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The forth chapter wasn't bad at all, just some grammer correction needed. You've done very well. I enjoy the story. Liked the Forth Ch. best.
As a suggestion for the next few chapters; if they're not long, why don't you just continue their day together to show how they're getting along and the interaction in between them. You could also have friends visit and have Naruto shown places where there should be some meaning to him; such as his apartment that's always messy, the ramen shop, the academy, you get the idea right? So there you go, I hope it helps.
Good luck and Best wishes.
Butterfly Beauty

It's all good DragonWolf, liked the prologue.
now I'm off to read the next chapters.^_^
Good luck and best wishes.
Butterfly Beauty

Good first chapter though you might want to check your grammer a few times you never know when something escapes you.
Well good luck and best wishes. Off to the next chapters.^_^
Butterfly Beauty

Bravo on the third chapter. Good job, I'm glad for you.
Hope all goes well in the future for you.
One more chapter to go, so good luck.
As well as the best of wishes.
Butterfly Beauty

This story is good it let you get in the charters head an almost feel there emotions thou I think the story would be better if it ended up being Saku/Naru and not Sasu/Naru.

one quick fix: "leaved" is not a word. Switch it to "left." ^^


Anyway, good job with the chapter. I thought you captured the awkward uncomfortableness well. Sasuke seems to have the right idea though about letting Naruto come to him. It kind of reminds me of dealing with a strange animal or cat. Don't make eye contact and let them come to you before you try to interact. Not that I'm implying that Naruto is an animal... or is he? Tsunade seems to be concerned about a possible merger. (hehe)


Keep up the good work!

That is sooo sad. Naruto, the one I know, is like that? Wow, It must be
hard for him. I hope they know how to get him back. I like your story
Hope you update soon.