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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i like this story but you should put narutos pov in there too. that would give us two sides of this story.
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April 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
it has potential and i like the "I'm fixed and not sure why" problem of gaara's. would like to see more.
and although temari may be OOC i hope it works for the sake of the story
and although temari may be OOC i hope it works for the sake of the story
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April 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hehehe... I can't wait until Gaara runs into a certin blond during his midnight run. *ahem. hehe
Keep up the good work!
Keep up the good work!
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
loved it!!!! can't wait to read more of this story!!!!!!!
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February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
HOLY CRAP??? IS GAARA A WEREWOLF???? !!!O_O!!!!
Anyway, this story is starting off pretty good. I don't know what you're complaining about regarding misspelled Japanese words, as you hardly put any in the story. Having your OC character named Tsuki (moon) makes me wonder if there's to be some sort of interesting tie-in either with Gaara, the title of the story, or *gasp* werewolves (screw vampire stories, I love werewolves, and certinly there aren't enough tales that feature them, heh.) The only critique I would have with your use of the language is that you had Temari call Gaara a 'dobe' -- which is Sasuke's pet name for Naruto. In its context in the story, calling Gaara a dobe makes no sense, as dobe literally translates out to 'dead last' (Naruto's standing in his class). Naruto's petname for Sasuke, Teme, means bastard, so feel free to use that one all the time as it is a general allround good insult. ^^
Anyway, keep up the good work. I enjoyed reading this and am looking forward to the next chapter.
Anyway, this story is starting off pretty good. I don't know what you're complaining about regarding misspelled Japanese words, as you hardly put any in the story. Having your OC character named Tsuki (moon) makes me wonder if there's to be some sort of interesting tie-in either with Gaara, the title of the story, or *gasp* werewolves (screw vampire stories, I love werewolves, and certinly there aren't enough tales that feature them, heh.) The only critique I would have with your use of the language is that you had Temari call Gaara a 'dobe' -- which is Sasuke's pet name for Naruto. In its context in the story, calling Gaara a dobe makes no sense, as dobe literally translates out to 'dead last' (Naruto's standing in his class). Naruto's petname for Sasuke, Teme, means bastard, so feel free to use that one all the time as it is a general allround good insult. ^^
Anyway, keep up the good work. I enjoyed reading this and am looking forward to the next chapter.
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February 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like your story so far ^_^
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February 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh and obviously my guess is he's a werewolf.