rate_review Reviews

very nicely done thanks for sharing this tale and i plan to look over your other tales to see if there are others i like

Um, hi. It's me again. Please! Please update! I'm begging you! I need to read a good story! And yours is one of the best I've ever read! Do you know how hard it is to find good stories? Very, very hard! So please update and satisfy my hunger for a good story (for now)! Please!
Alright, I'm done with the shameless begging now.

hi, i considered delving into actual participation when i saw you manage to use the word twitterpated, but actually clicked the link when i saw you describe yourself as asexual! over the last couple of months this site has become my main form of procrastination after i stumbled on it with very little prior knowledge of either fan fiction or anime, and i've been idly wondering just how consuming quite that many sex scenes fitted with my considering myself largely asexual. i'd love it if you could offer me any perspectives...
meanwhile, i thoroughly enjoyed your writing on this story, with interesting characterisations, well set scenes and thoughtful touches. and of course, the simple luxury of well-constructed writing!
as for your question about smut - i'm sure anything you wrote wouldn't be out of place, especially if you're looking at it as part of the narrative rather than comparing to someone else's work who specialises in sex. you already have intimacy, interaction, development and thought processes down nicely, and i can't see these characters warranting a huge style change just because they get their clothes off. but it would also be interesting to see how you portray resolution and the security of commitment without such a cipher as a sex scene. for they really do seem to be used as a shortcut to portray happily-ever-after, despite how little sex really seems to match up with such a sentiment off the page!
now i guess i'll go off and read the rest of your stuff here. or maybe those ed theory readings i should be doing. i wonder which will win out...
thanks!
kate

you know, chrysanthemum's mean homosexuality, too. lol. i thought THAT was why you named it that.

Oh my gosh! I just realized I haven't been on adultfanfiction forever, and then I totally remembered this story and I was like "I can't believe I forgot about this story! I have to check it out!" Truthfully, I thought you would have made more than one update but I'm not mad. I liked this chapter, it was funny. And oh my gosh Ino is so friggin' annoying! So is everyone else. They're all so nosey. I would just stop answering my door or curse them out or something. But anyway, I think you should put some smut in there. Yeah...so...bye!

omg y havent u upated yet..... *whines*

PLEASE UPDATE
DONT GIVE UP ON THIS
IT S SOOOOOO GOOOOOODDDD


you've had me waiting for months and its so not fair

PLEASE UPDATE
i'll love u forever

*CHIBI Sango offers lots of cookies as bribe*

Looking forward to read the update, hope it's soon. I like how the relationship rogressed from friendship to love. This story is just the type of plot i love.*hands cookies*

I know it's not the most intelligent review, but I really do love this story.
I personally was put off slightly by the '1337' chapter, which I would rather have done without. I like how your perception of Neji is and Shikamaru is always nice to read about and you've done him justice.

Oh my God! I cannot believe I almost missed the next chapter o.O I haven't read it yet but I just know it will be amazing! And don't be miserable about not getting the chapters done. Just as long as you finish it I'm a ve~ry happy yaoi-fangirl ^_^ Keep going and don't loose your spirit! 'kay, now I'm off reading the latest chapter. Bye bye

Please smut scene! Hopefully with some finger action *nudge nudge* XP