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*sighs in contenment* I love these kinda stories.. specially with Itachi.. There are just not enough Itachi/Naru stories.. I should write one.. on second thought I have a bad habit of starting things and never finishing *mumbles about stupid muses*

Though I would like to point out one small word correction that I notice alot of authors make.. Instead of excepted it should actually be accepted.. ie ( This quote is directly from your story)

'Hinata had offered to make the cake, which he gladly
excepted.'

this should actually read

Hinata had offered to make the cake, which he gladly
accepted.

I hope this helps in your writing, as I said Ive noticed quite a few stories Ive read make that same mistake and since I really never read reviews for stories Im not sure if anyone else ever points that out.

Anyway Good luck and happy writing ^_^

Ja ne

OH!!! HOW I LOVE THIS FIC! It's so sweet and tender and beautiful that I enjoyed every moment of it. It's so hard to find good ItaNaru fics lately, so yours was a great treat. Thanks so much for sharing. can't wait to read more. :D

Oh I'm so glad you updated again. I thought you forgot about this. This was such a sweet chapter. Everyone's all moved in and now they can live as a family for real. Hiroki's so sweet and now he's also talking regularly to them. That's wonderful.

Awww, it's going to be such a surprise when Naruto comes home to his birthday celebration with all his precious people. Later to have his son and boyfriend to play his favorite piece for him as well, will be the best treat of all for Naruto. I'm so excited. I can't wait for Naruto's reaction.:)

WOW!!!! The party was a success and Naruto was gifted with rings in triplicate for Hiroki and his lover as well. Then Sasuke gave another surprise which was so caring and then took Hiroki into his wing for the night so Hiroki could have his own special night. Lastly, the wonderful lemon you gifted us with. Rather Naruto was gifted with.:)

Itachi's so sneaky. I'm glad he's making a big fuss over Naruto's birthday.
Hopefully Naruto appreciates it a lot.
I thought it was cute how ready Hiroki was to do the extra practice to play for his 'momma'.
I can't wait for more.

okay. after reading your reply to my review, i reread my review and then the reply again. thank you for responding, it made me feel special. i understand a bit better your reasons now. i think i was a bit used to the writing styles of other, usually younger, writers, whose stories are shorterish. like, fifteen chapters and down. however, this last chapter showed me some of what i'd been curious about and i think i've realized what's going on. so thanks. as far as i can tell, and perhaps i'm misreading some signal of some sort, most of the story has been about them becoming close to each other and hiroki, the cuteset oc in naruto history, and a little bit of foreshadowing and set-up for what's to come once they're becoming a family. so. good story. i saw it on the page and went 'hey, didn't i read that?'. i thought i'd missed an update at some point, but i hadn't. which is quite the surprise, as i haven't been checking on naruto for a couple weeks now. anyway, i'll shut up now. great job and i'm looking forward to more!~

Awwww, this one is sooooooo cute, it almost got me to tears at the end..... PLEASE update soon, ne....!!!! ^_^

glarg. this is JUST great. two a.m. and i have class at nine. and i need a shower. perfect. anyway, i was really drawn to your story (obviously, since i didn't stop until the end at two in the morning). however, as it went on, i was bothered by some flaws. usually i look over errors, such as spelling and grammar when it doesn't interfere too much, which is still the case here. my problems are a bit more detailed-oriented. such as:
iruka thought something about itachi being the heir and 'what would naruto think?' but we never had that answered. and what happened to itachi and sasuke's family? that was mentioned as the 'family tragedy', but never addressed afterwards. and what exactly happened with that gold-digging kitsuna-bitch? and sasuke was worried about the possibility of naruto being another gold digger, however when they met he liked him immediately. i was really hoping for a bit more conflict there. i could just picture sasuke confronting naruto about his intentions, and naruto finding out how filthy rich they were that way. now i'm dying for itachi to propose to naruto.
the lemon was good, and i do like the plotline, if only it were developed a little better. also, some more description, like the rooms and objects around them, would be very helpful. i remember one point thinking that the only thing i knew about the room in that scene was that there was a table near the door, even though naruto went through four different rooms. it's okay to have detailed description. in fact, it's better to be too detailed than not detailed enough (in my opinion, not that i'm good at it). these are just some thoughts for you to consider.
anyway, it's mostly hiroki holding me glued to this fic because the storyline was starting to drag with the lack of adventure and drama. it's all just...perfect. maybe TOO perfect? *raised brow* somehow, i doubt that. darn. remember to keep things interesting, and a little crazy never hurt anybody. please keep writing, because you have potential and i'd like to continue to read this.
one more thing. i definately thought it was sasuke right up until he said his own name. it was crazy. and even then i contemplated the possibility of sasuke using his brother's name, though it wasn't likely. itachi crossed my mind when it said his hair was in a ponytail, but so did neji.
ANYWAY!!!! enough rambling! i must sleep now! goodnight, and have a pleasant evening!!!~

This story is fantastic! It took me two day to read but I've loved every mint of it. Please update as soon as you can. Great Work!!^__^