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person littleolmee
schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Such a great chapter. Loved how much time Naruto is spending with Hinata and Sasuke and all the help he is giving to the kids. I agree with your idea not to give the children blond hair, besides isn't blond hair less common when one of the parents have dark hair? Lol, figures something would be passed that will give a clue that Naruto has some parentage with these children. Better be careful when it comes to people like Shikamaru seeing the children, that's something he'd pick up on. Hmm . . . just what are the marks then? If they are from the Kyuubi then has Naruto passed any of the Kyuubi on to the children? If they aren't are the marks from one of Naruto's family? I do have a question though. Being that Hinata married into the Uchiha family and left the Hyuugi why would they be interested in giving her children the caged bird seal? Couldn't Sasuke simply put that the children are Uchihas and not Hyuugi so wouldn't need the seal plus if only one child has the Hyuugi's eyes then that seal wouldn't be needed either would it? Will the fact they don't have Hyuugi eyes be an issue? Since it would seem to be a dominate gene. I guess they could pass it being the Uchiha eyes would be a dominate gene too. I guess it's a good thing that the babies eyes are a darker blue. Can't wait when the naming ceremony happens and they use all of the names Naruto came up with. Great story, thanks so much for the update. I so look forward to your updates. Have a great weekend.

littleolmee
person mls1971
schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
loved the new chapter!!! can't wait to read the next one!!!! keep up the great work!!!!!!
schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I don't know why everyone who does one of these baby fics always assumes some of the kids will have blonde hair! Blond is a recessive trait. Of course all four of them would have dark hair. Both "mothers" are a pair of blue highlighted ravens! ^^


Keep up the great work. I'm truly excited to find out what the whisker marks might indicate. =o_o= Update soon! :D
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schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oooo! Whisker marks....how did they get them...this has to do with the kyuubi I know it! I cant wait to see how people will react to them though! How will this be explained away!? And when will they tell Sakura and Naruto that all four of them are married?! O.o I cant wait for more!
schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It was sweet that sasuke cried tears of happiness. I probably would have too...actually...i probably am now ^_^ Wonderful!
schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the new chapter!! I wonder if Naruto and Sakura are already having marital problems? That would be a good thing for Sasuke! So the whiskers marks are going to be seen by everyone in the next chapter? Can't wait to see how Sasuke and Hinata explain that! :D
person Ivy
schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed this chapter! uber sweet ;-)
schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love this fic. it's so cute yet weird (in a good way) =)
So keep up with the good work, I can't wait 'til Naruto finds out about him being the father to the children as well as him and Sasuke getting together.
So please don't take to long on the update. take care. hugs
person hpn827
schedule June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I wonder what Hiashi is going to think when he finds that the babies have blue eyes.
At the end there it seems like Sasuke is willing to share Naruto w/ Hinata.
schedule June 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awww! It would be sweet if the girl baby was Sasuke's and Naruto's and the one that Naruto is holding, too! Sasuke should be allowed to have at least half the babies as his! :D Thanks for the new chapter! :)