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hey good work cant wait to see wat happens next

good so far

Hmm, well this story defiantly has potential. So far you have done a very nice job at setting up the whole course of the story by having Naruto go around and ask for help in a few different areas. I thought that having Naruto say that he never actually learned to read the kanji was a great way to explain why he has never liked to read much. At some point are you going to take advantage of the shadow clones and have each one read a different book so that he can learn faster? That might be a nice way to speed up some of his learning, which would at the same time make personality change can happen somewhat quicker (depending on the type of books some of the clones were reading).

Also, his resolution to make people notice him because of his talents and not because of how loud he is or the clothes he wears was a great reaction to his severe rejection from Sakura. One thing that I always look for are the reactions of the characters to many different types of situations or events. So far you have done a wonderful job with that in this story and I hope you continue.

Personally, I never thought that Naruto's sexy jutsu would ever have any "real" use. But, you were able to prove me wrong by having him model that outfit for Tenten, which was very amusing.

Another thing is that as I was reading your story, I couldn't help but notice that everything was very well put together and very clear. Either you spent a lot of time putting this together or you are just a rather good writer.

I must say that a Naruto/Temari fic is quite different, and will most likely make for an interesting story. I will look forward to reading the future chapters in this story. Please update soon.

OMG!! I love this story sooo much! I hope Sakura totally gets rejected and ignored by Naruto. Mainly because I hate Sakura with a passion, but still Naruto can do WAY better than her. And Temari is the right chick!! So please you gotta update soon. Now if you'll excuse me, I have to go glomp and flirt with Sasuke (even if he is behind those damn bars lol)

Lol it'd be funny if Sasuke didn't want Sakura either.....*insert evil laugh*

I like where this story is going and your writing style is excellent. I cant wait for the next chapter.

very interesting. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing more of this story. It's also very refreshing to see a story on this site that doesn't have poor spelling or grammar. Keep it up!

I've never read a NarutoxTemari. Wow! I'm really looking forward to more!!

I guess this counts as a flame...hope it's not harsh, well may be not too harsh..

What the heck? A man to man talk about 'tears?', like that of all things?, that's just weird... The whole drastic change can be too much, I mean too drastic and very coincendential. Talks, conversations are a bit rushed, like they can read each other's minds or something. They talk, come to agreement just like that, they make up their minds just like that. I mean what hapeened to the decision making and negotiations... Wham! Eveything changes, him suddenly taking on genjutsu, taijutsu, armamments, the next thing you know he's perfect in every way.

Hey I like the start but what are they Jonin or Chunin... When did they get Sasuke back and where is everybody... I know Jiraiya is still the mega perv that he was from the beggining so why is Sasuke in a cell...

Its fairly good, I didn't spot any beginner mistakes. Hope you keep writing, however, I do wish that you had written more