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Could I beta this for you? From the beginning? I just started reading this and I love the plot line, but there are a lot of malappropisms like "how could an 18yr old boy wiegh so light" when it should be "how could an 18yr old boy be so light?" or "how could an 18yr old boy wiegh so little?"

Let me know either way at keitaros _ kero _ neko at yahoo dot com

Oh, and please update soon =^-^=

This chapter was awesome! Reading about the progression of their relationship was sweet. Too bad Orochimaru had to come around and mess up all the happiness everyone was feeling. The end of the chapter was very sad!

I love this story. Great job!
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Yasha i love you!!!!you are a wounderful writer and don't let any one (inculeding your rents) tell you other wise!!keep it up!!i can't wait for the next chapter1!!XD

You are a god. This story is so amazing! I've seen it on the new page for a while but i wasn't sure if it would interest me but OH MY GOD (that you) it's unbelievable. I just read the whole thing. You're writing is amazing!!! It's like poetry! So fluid and well described. You totally blew my mind and all hopes of me getting some writing done today. Bravo m'dear.
Cheers
Meg

This story is really intense and emotionally charged! You've done a brilliant job with your plot and you really keep the reader on the edge wondering whats going to happen next! I can't wait to read more! I hope Sasuke and Naruto work out their many problems and finally be together! I'll be looking forward to your next update!

awwww that was sooooo great!!!! please review! i'm in tears right now, OMG what a wonderful story you have made! it's the kind of story i've been looking for!

I'm m now one of your biggest fan!!!!

PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOONNN!!!!!

I wouldn't have minded seeing this story for Gravitation, I could see it actually fitting really well with Shuichi and Eiri. Eiri's kind of gruff and mean but also you can see that he loves Shuichi. And Shuichi is also a bit too innocent (though not as bad as Ayase) and really forgiving. Now I kind of wish I could see it for Gravitation.

For this story though, I like that you're not following the storyline of the manga exactly. A lot of people have done adaptations of other stories but aren't original enough in how they do it. But that's not a problem here. I have to say about the ending, if they had to have gotten caught running away, this is the perfect way for it to be done. They at least have a reason outside of, we're in love and we're running away, which I'm pretty sure I can say wouldn't fly with Sasuke at all and would probably bring about the most vicious of consequences. But Sakura is trying to kill me is a pretty good reason and hopefully neither Sai nor Naruto will be too hurt by Sasuke.

THAT PINK-HAIRED BITCH NEEDS TO DIE!! SASUKE IS NARUTO'S NOT HERS! AND SASUKE BETTER HAVE A GOOD EXPLAINION FOR LEAVING NARUTO WITH THAT STUIPD SHE-DEVIL OR ELSE WE'LL RIP HIM A NEW ONE!

All right! Naruto stands up for himself! Good for him!

Itachi is a weasel and Sasuke is just full of shit. Nothing new there.

Naruto is going to have to teach both of them valuable lessons.