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September 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
YAY he lived ... i was wondering how that would work out ...
can't wait to find out what happens next :D
can't wait to find out what happens next :D
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September 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love you for that. I really thought you killed him.
I wouldn't be adverse to the idea of Ita/Naru/Sasu.
Just no ItaSasu lemon please.
I wouldn't be adverse to the idea of Ita/Naru/Sasu.
Just no ItaSasu lemon please.
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September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this story is amazing. This last chapter actually brought tears to my eyes, I might not like Sakura, but to kill her in such a way, I mean its poetic really, she deserved to die, and in her death brought her retribution for the wrongs she did to get to where she was. I hope to read more from this soon.
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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Gah! I just finished reading chapter 8 and I had to stop and review.
Its just not possible to have identical twins (twins from one egg) that have two separate fathers. Just not possible. Took me right out of the story!! Fraternal twins? Maybe. I'd be willing to suspend my disbelief and accept fraternal twins with one father being Sasuke and the other Itachi. But you went out of the way to point out only one egg was fertilized and had split into twins. z_z You should really go back and change that. I would normally never tell anyone to change some aspect of their story, but its such a simple change that would keep the story based in reality, relatively speaking.
I'm going to continue reading and probably review again when I'm done. But I just had to say something. :/
Its just not possible to have identical twins (twins from one egg) that have two separate fathers. Just not possible. Took me right out of the story!! Fraternal twins? Maybe. I'd be willing to suspend my disbelief and accept fraternal twins with one father being Sasuke and the other Itachi. But you went out of the way to point out only one egg was fertilized and had split into twins. z_z You should really go back and change that. I would normally never tell anyone to change some aspect of their story, but its such a simple change that would keep the story based in reality, relatively speaking.
I'm going to continue reading and probably review again when I'm done. But I just had to say something. :/
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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Boy names: Kanaye, Takumi, Riku
Girl names: Kaori
Sorry, but thats all I can think of.
BTW, I love that you kept Naruto alive!!! I do kinda feel bad for Sakura though, but it will pass.
Girl names: Kaori
Sorry, but thats all I can think of.
BTW, I love that you kept Naruto alive!!! I do kinda feel bad for Sakura though, but it will pass.
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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
O.O SAKURA'S DEAD!! ... *Conflicted.*
oh.. I always loved "Suki" For a girl's name.
oh.. I always loved "Suki" For a girl's name.
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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A Friendly Reminder
Just thought I'd leave you a note to let you know your disclaimer is lacking. According to the Terms of Service you need to include that you are in fact making no money from writing this story, and that you do not own the people involved. Also it wouldn't hurt to include that this story is indeed fiction.
Even though this story is about fictional characters, it needs to be known that they are not yours and you’re not making any money. You know a ’cover your butt’ thing.
Also if you have included one of these things it’s not enough. You have to have a full disclaimer. This is not only to protect us but to protect you!
Feel free to remove this once the problem is corrected. Thanks ^_^
Just thought I'd leave you a note to let you know your disclaimer is lacking. According to the Terms of Service you need to include that you are in fact making no money from writing this story, and that you do not own the people involved. Also it wouldn't hurt to include that this story is indeed fiction.
Even though this story is about fictional characters, it needs to be known that they are not yours and you’re not making any money. You know a ’cover your butt’ thing.
Also if you have included one of these things it’s not enough. You have to have a full disclaimer. This is not only to protect us but to protect you!
Feel free to remove this once the problem is corrected. Thanks ^_^
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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I just finished all of the chapters and I have to say I really enjoyed this story. (Apart from that one part, but whatever.) I couldn't believe it when you killed off Naruto, but I'm glad it was only Sakura instead. I'm happy to see she reformed her obsessive ways in the end and sought penance. I guess living with and getting to know the "real" Sasuke broke her illusion. Hopefully when Naruto pardons Sasuke, he'll seek redemption too.
Keep up the good work. This is an enjoyable story. ^^
Keep up the good work. This is an enjoyable story. ^^
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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Even though it was short, it was still a great chapter. Names, eh? Hmm.... How about Muyoku for Sasuke and Sakura's kid? It means selfless or unselfish as seeing how Sakura gave up her life or that of her child's to save Naruto. As for the twins... If Itachi's child was born first, how about Saisho, which means beginning/first. It's his, Naruto's and their child's new beginning in their life together. Last but not least, Sasuke and Naruto's kid. ... This was a bit hard. So, how about Kouyuu? It means frienship/schoolmate. Fits with Sasu and Naru, ne? As you can guess, I think they should all be boys. Ya know all that dominate "Uchiha"ness. ::snickers::
Can't wait for the next chapter, so keep up the outstanding writing. Until the next update, Ja!
Can't wait for the next chapter, so keep up the outstanding writing. Until the next update, Ja!
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September 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just wanted to point out that the proper term for the compound that erases sperm is "Spermicide" and that the proper term for sperm, if you don't want to use that word, is a zygote this being 24 chromosomes (half of the required 48 chromosomes needed to make a living sentiant being) the other 24 chromosomes being provided by the egg. When they merge this forms 48 chromosomes and starts the process of cell devision that will eventually result in the body of the baby.
Thanks for listening,
-Nisha
Thanks for listening,
-Nisha