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May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WAAA! gowd i like uzumakicest. yessss. you have good smut talent. =]
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May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
And just when I thought I found the perfect story, something like this pops up! This was, in all honesty, the hottest thing my eyes have ever seen! I thought I would die at some parts! God, I thought nobody would ever do a Minato/Naruto. This was perfect and so sinuosly hot, I can't believe words can be so sexy. And the things I envisioned, oh I'm sure my peverted thoughts were the accompanying movie to this story. It was so detailed and long, and great and...I don't know how else to describe it. Just perfect. It would be nice if you jumped on the Mina/Naru bandwagon and made this pairing your signature pairing because no one else writes this. With talent like this, you would be God.
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May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
great story! I loved the interaction between the two and the way you built things up. And, of course, the smex was HOT!!! Just to let you know to do italics and bold on aff you need to put < i> without the space in front of the word and < /i> behind it... bold works the same way but with a "b" instead of the "i". I had the same problem when I first started posting here, so I can sympathize.
Anyway, awesome PWP. Extremely drool-worthy!! XD
Anyway, awesome PWP. Extremely drool-worthy!! XD
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May 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I would like to just take this moment to say...damn. I never ever review but after a fic like this I felt compelled to do so. Without a doubt one of the best fics I have ever read. I still can't believe this is your first lemon. That was beyond hot, we're talking serious gushing bloody action from the nose area. I have never read any fics pertaining to this pairing so yet another great idea you have had. If I had a hat it would go off to you.
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May 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh god!!!
your first serious lemon???
.:drools:.
I think I'm --- yeah ¬¬ you don't wanna know :lol
hey, but I check your profile and you don't have more fics! do you have a ff or a lj or a y-gal account where I can stalk you?
your first serious lemon???
.:drools:.
I think I'm --- yeah ¬¬ you don't wanna know :lol
hey, but I check your profile and you don't have more fics! do you have a ff or a lj or a y-gal account where I can stalk you?
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May 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*falls onto knees at your feet*..Holy...merciful...FUCK!!! That was the hottest lemon matched with the hottest pairing that i've read in MONTHS!!! Thank you for the pairing! Thank you for the writing genius! Thank you for the generosity you've shown by posting this brilliant work. Will this continue? Please let it continue! I loved it! WE loved it! More plzzzzz
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May 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've never really considered Minato/Naruto as a viable pairing before, not because of the incest (we yaoi fangirls tend to eat most taboo topics like cheesecake) but because there was no foundation whatsoever. And I don't mean a foundation of the sexual sort, I mean any sort of relationship at all, since Minato and Naruto never really had a chance to bond. Not only that but the fact that it's hard to characterize how Minato would act with Naruto and vice versa since we're not given even an inkling of that in the manga.
That being said, I thought you did a wonderful job portraying a could-have-been. Sure, a could-have-been that could-have-only-ever-occurred-in-fanfiction, but a solid one nevertheless. At first I didn't think it could really be classified as anything but a PWP (and it would've made a damn good one regardless) but I think you might have something in there worth continuing. I thought the dialog exchange between the two - both father/son and lovers was spot on... at least to how I see it in my mind.
As for your writing itself, length wise, I adored it. You drew the lemon out the way its meant to be done without getting too technical - you didn't describe ever single twitch of their hand/cock/pancreas (what? it's been done before, don't look at me like that!) but you gave enough powerful imagery that I could visualize it without a second thought.
...in other words, it was HOT.
The flow of the entire fic was smooth and unhurried, and I loved that about it. You gave us time to sink into the story and the characterizations before making us all hot and bothered (and may I add you did that *quite* well) and I really appreciate that, along with the fact that you actually took the time to write an honest to god DECENT piece of fiction. That's something that is damn hard to find these days.
I enjoyed reading and the fact that I almost never review should tell you just how much. :D
I look forward to seeing more from you, whether it be a continuation of this story (I would LOVE that) or anything else you could think to write up.
Much love,
Ella
That being said, I thought you did a wonderful job portraying a could-have-been. Sure, a could-have-been that could-have-only-ever-occurred-in-fanfiction, but a solid one nevertheless. At first I didn't think it could really be classified as anything but a PWP (and it would've made a damn good one regardless) but I think you might have something in there worth continuing. I thought the dialog exchange between the two - both father/son and lovers was spot on... at least to how I see it in my mind.
As for your writing itself, length wise, I adored it. You drew the lemon out the way its meant to be done without getting too technical - you didn't describe ever single twitch of their hand/cock/pancreas (what? it's been done before, don't look at me like that!) but you gave enough powerful imagery that I could visualize it without a second thought.
...in other words, it was HOT.
The flow of the entire fic was smooth and unhurried, and I loved that about it. You gave us time to sink into the story and the characterizations before making us all hot and bothered (and may I add you did that *quite* well) and I really appreciate that, along with the fact that you actually took the time to write an honest to god DECENT piece of fiction. That's something that is damn hard to find these days.
I enjoyed reading and the fact that I almost never review should tell you just how much. :D
I look forward to seeing more from you, whether it be a continuation of this story (I would LOVE that) or anything else you could think to write up.
Much love,
Ella