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May 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think this is such an interesting idea! I hope you continue with the story. It makes me think of a more twisted version of little mermaid..hahaha
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May 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is awesome. It's so novel and different version of the little mermaid & naruto. I can't wait to see how you develop it.
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May 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This looks awesome. And I love the way you write, furthermore I love your voice of everyone thus far. Sikamaru the lazy mermaid who somehow makes me think of a salty seadog and Sasuke the war minded little mermaid who has almost been sexed up.
The transformation was most certainly unsexy, but I liked it that way. Somehow, Sasuke twirling like a ballerina as he effortlessly turns into a human just wouldn't fit. That and it wouldn't allow for him to confused and drowning, allowing him to be pulled to the surface by a (hopefully) sexy stranger (who is hopefully Naruto or closely related to him in a friendly manner? Maybe it's a pirate who would be sexy by virtue of being?). Anyway, anonymous sexy stranger pulling drowning after unsexy transformation Sasuke out of the water balances to a sexy encounter. Therefor, it and the transformation is sexy. Needless to say, I am hooked and I can't wait for the next chapter!
The transformation was most certainly unsexy, but I liked it that way. Somehow, Sasuke twirling like a ballerina as he effortlessly turns into a human just wouldn't fit. That and it wouldn't allow for him to confused and drowning, allowing him to be pulled to the surface by a (hopefully) sexy stranger (who is hopefully Naruto or closely related to him in a friendly manner? Maybe it's a pirate who would be sexy by virtue of being?). Anyway, anonymous sexy stranger pulling drowning after unsexy transformation Sasuke out of the water balances to a sexy encounter. Therefor, it and the transformation is sexy. Needless to say, I am hooked and I can't wait for the next chapter!
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I vote continue! And it's nice not to have it precisely follow The Little Mermaid :P more interesting / novel that way. Why should the transformation be sexy? It's not supposed to happen! Also, I like that the merfolk are even fishy looking than in the Disney movie. More, por favor!
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this is lovely!!!! I only hope it doesn't end in tragedy like the original Hans Christian Anderson version of the story.... BTW, two things: 1st, have you by chance seen the MerSuke pictures over on DA? If not....
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Poor-unfortunate-sod-49738717
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Mersuke-and-Mertachi-72160546
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Siren-of-the-Sea-50094494
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/The-trouble-with-combustion-50395608
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Sasuke-the-little-mermaid-49359734
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Put-it-away-mersuke-69707443
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/She-s-my-merman-75165513
and 2nd, in the Japanese movie of Kingdom Hearts, guess who plays the voice of Ursula....wait for it...wait for it....the VERY SAME voice actor who does *le gasp* OROCHIMARU!!!!
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Poor-unfortunate-sod-49738717
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Mersuke-and-Mertachi-72160546
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Siren-of-the-Sea-50094494
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/The-trouble-with-combustion-50395608
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Sasuke-the-little-mermaid-49359734
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/Put-it-away-mersuke-69707443
http://felisdeityus.deviantart.com/art/She-s-my-merman-75165513
and 2nd, in the Japanese movie of Kingdom Hearts, guess who plays the voice of Ursula....wait for it...wait for it....the VERY SAME voice actor who does *le gasp* OROCHIMARU!!!!
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great start! Now I can't wait to see where it goes! So please update soon because I'll be checking.
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think you should definitely continue :)
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think the transformation was perfect. The whole gritty details of it plus the bird shit covered rock and everything. Would be interested in learning a bit more about the binding with the merfolk sex though... do they bind to each other or just the sumissive to the dominant? You would think that Orochimaru wouldn't take a chance if it was a mutual binding, obviously.
Very interested in seeing this continue!! XD
Very interested in seeing this continue!! XD
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love it!! It's great so far! And the transformation is very realistic and very well written, I really enjoyed reading the whole chapter and I'm looking forward to the next one!
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
seems interesting, have to see more to know whether it could be great, but its a good start in my opinion