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Dandji finally comes out of the closet regarding his identity! I look forward to the next chapter when he has to explain to Naruto why. ^^

As for voting... um, I personally really don't care as to how many people there are per team so I guess why mess with a well worked out formula and just stick with three genin per team. :P
Keep up the good work.

just finished reading1-3 chaps, this is really good. yay he's gonna use kyu chakra, wonder who what will happen with kid at the end of chap. 3.

On the sexy jutsu your logic works for me. So the tailed beast have two cats in their ranks in your world the other being the two tailed cat who is in a female ninja from the village hidden in the clouds, her name is Yugito Nii not sure which is her last name. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Naruto this is the wikipedia page it might be of some help for some of the jutsu and other things. On the writing when you change who is speaking or thinking you start a new line it makes it easier tell you is talking and is easier to read. About the end of the third chapter it is odd that the Anbu would jump to that conclusion and even if they had they would of either taken her with them or would have left her guarded while the others went to get backup to help escort her back to the village. Please update soon. Signed a fan of Tayuya, Hinata, Anko, Kurenai, Temari, and fem Kyuubi. P.S. I did like the chapter.

hehe.. nice chapter!


Also, I find it completely unacceptable that you can not buy ramen in Denmark. Feel free to send my your address via email (serenagold@gmail.com) and I'll send you ramen. My god. Ramenless... I did not think such a thing was possible.

Another interesting chapter and I say go for Tayuya. If Dandji wants to help Hinata and Naruto get together he should have Hinata train with Naruto. And the fox should be trying to push Naruto towards Hinata like her demon is trying to push her to Naruto. On Naruto's jutsu what no sexy jutsu? Signed a fan of Hinata, Tayuya, Anko, Kurenai, and Temari.

Hmm interesting beginning and changes to the story of Naruto. I would like to see where this tale goes so please continue. Signed a fan of Hinata, Tayuya, Anko, Kurenai, and Temari.

Alright, first off to get my only major complaint out of the way. His last name comes from his mother, not his father. Though now that a re-read the summary, I'm sure you've already thought of that. Though I'm guessing the reason Kishimoto used his mother's family name rather than his fathers was because of basic storyline. The villagers have a tremendous amount of respect for Minato, hell for all of the Hokages really, so they probably would have treated Naruto more like they treat Konohamaru if they had the blatantly obvious familial ties. The similarities in appearance can simply be passed off as coincidence for those who truly wish to hate and/or harm him. His mother however doesn't appear to be nearly as well known, so using her last name rather than fourths would cause them to think he's just a demon wretch with no one to protect him. (Tough call for Sarutobi, seriously, demon container growing up as a spoiled brat because of who his father it, or demon container being raised by the school of hard knocks.) I'm pretty sure I'm correct in my assumptions here, but I have been proven wrong on many occasions. But yeah aside from that and the grammar errors which you were already aware existed, it's a good story idea. Though I do advise getting someone to beta for you. It'll help smooth out some of the rough spots and plot holes that may/probably will appear in doing AU/AR. Seriously, I know how much of a bitch they can be. Anyway, good luck and I hope to see more of this soon.

Okay, I'm totally willing to Beta/Edit for you, I just need to know where to send the chapters to is all. So, I'll get started on the editing and I'll let you decide how you want things done. Though I would like to know a bit more about Dandji as a person- though that can be done through e-mail to avoid spoilers.

whoa wait... Hinata is a demon too? o_O


Also.. I could just be nitpicking... but taking a shower as he waits for instant ramen to cook? Huh? You boil water and pour it in a cup and wait three minutes for it to soak. That's it. The whole wording of that sentence just struck me as wrong. You do know how to make ramen, yes??



Other than that, great story. I loved the opening chapter and its overall premise. I personally like how you chose to introduce Minato's brother before Naruto fails a third time or discovers he holds the Kyuubi. It opens the story up for so many new directions. Well done. Keep up the good work!