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first of all... they're 13!!?! and shika had an 8 inches cock??!? imagine how big he is when he's 18. AHHAhahahha... anyway...

geez, i thought that they're at least 16. you know, you dun have to rely on chuunin exam to explain everything you know,. there's a lot of make up reason you can come up with, make up some detailed mission as your plot, these guys will grow up at some point. having sex at 13 is only suggestd social degradation of the community itself. not flaming, but it was confusing... at first and quite...scaring. both the characters and the readers.

overall, the storyline is good, kunoichi worming through their target using sex is a total classic - but it always work. however, i can't help but notice, the first 5 or 6 chapters of this fic is wonderfully written (up until the oral in the wood, and yes, no matter how you much you tried to deny it, oral is considered sex, and kakashi should know better), but it getting sloppy towards the end. more plothole appears and... the ending is totally crappy (sorry!!! had to say this). major inconsistent with the ages... i mean, the sex and interaction during the earlier part of the fic suggested that they're way older and the revelation that shika is actually 13 is like being splashed by a bucket full of ice. no kidding! my first thought was (13!! holy shyt i was reading kiddies porn!!!)

and ino losing her virginity at 13 is... a tragedy. seriously.

ah, i did mentioned the plotholes earlier right? noticed that shika's quite serious neck injury magically disappear in the last chapter and ino was hugging him tightly. that must have been freakingly hurts.

Hey, it's Brittany. I kind of stopped reading Naruto fics for awhile so I wasn't watching to updates on AFF. But I started really liking Naruto fics again and so I came back to finish the fic! I think you did a really good job on the ending. I like how she ended up forgiving him and how they saved her and blahblahblah. I think that there was only one mistake as far as I read, but I'm not too sure where it was. And I can't help but wonder what the 'shadowy' figure was when they were hugging. I think this does leave room for a sequel because of that 'shadowy' figure that you mentioned, but of course, it's up to you whether or not you'd like to write a sequel or not. Great job!

Okay, I just have to review this chapter. Poor Ino! I don't know what I'd do if I was in her place. I understand she thought of Shikamaru raping her because it was just against her will! I hope Kakashi could save her. Btw, your story is fantastic. Cheers~

The ending was short, but you wrapped it up quite nicely. I'd love if you write more ShikaxIno story because you are good at doing it. So good luck to you!

Hey! Glad I found this! I have read almost all ShikaxIno fanfics in fanfiction.net and stumble upon this site ans saw this. This is a very great start.

I'm following your threesome story with Team 7 but I hadn't read this one till now. Wow. You have a twisted, devious mind and I like it! Hope the sequel happens!

My vote is for the finished story, but I also like the sound of that last one.

They're headed to the Uchiha district, right? I wonder how Ino will handle actually returning to the place she was raped. That will be interesting to read. I can't wait to see what you've got planned for the final chapters of this fic.

Keep up the good work!

~Angel

Wow, this chapter needs to be fixed

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an enjoyable chapter, quite the mind fuck for shikamaru there hehe i look forward to the next chapter