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I might not make your day, but you've really made mine :] A completely different and realistic view of sex is great, and what everyone needs [even if only once in a while]. LOL, I've always contemplated laughter during sex. I have a friend who will laugh if you even wiggle a finger at her--air ticklish, what can ya do? A very vulgar...acquaintance of mine said he feels sorry for whomever she'll have sex with. Think about it, laughing at him before he even gets the chance to touch her? I'm pretty sure he'll assume she's laughing at his equipment, poor guy xD

Thank you for this interesting and [at least to me] new view on sex.

Ella,

You are so right... fanfiction sex is not realistic... check out this site that was made by a real gay man for people who write Slash... it gives great insight just before one would write a slash sex scene. Note: there are explicited pictures that go along with what is explained...

http://www.squidge.org/~minotaur/classic/eroc.html

Anissa34

P.S, Patiently awaiting for an update of your fantastic fic... Cat tales! And I hope life is treating you well!

Okay, I have never had sex before so I don't know anything from personal experience. Hell, I've never even kissed anyone before and thats pretty sad coming from someone who is almost 20. But even I know that those perfect sex scenes are bs. Like you said, a completely fake sex scene really can ruin an otherwise good story. Anywhos, enough babbling, the point is that I am glad that someone was willing to write something like this, something realistic. Sorry if I sound like a moron or something but I really wanted ta tell ya thanks and job well done.

I loved this story and will recommend it to my friends. Fanfiction with cliche smut tends to get boring. It's good to see that someone is considering the reality of things. I'm not used to reviewing but I just had to review this story!

bwahaha... i loved this. it was genuine and real and sweet AND more importantly well written.

i understand your skepticism about the perfect ' iver never had sex before but im still a sex god and will make you come' stereotype that fanfictions love to portray but i guess its just like in a mill n boons novel... real life just isnt like that .. which is why we need a mushy totally unrealistic romance novel to warm ourselves at night..hehe. so dont be too hard on all those gooey fics out there... its just fiction after all.

but saying that, there's always an 'ugh, thats too much' line that is crossed very often. so your fic was a breath of fresh air. im glad you wrote it. reality check anyone? hehehehe.

All I have to say is Thank You! My first time was wayyy more embarassing than what you've put up, but atleast it was a lot closer than most people make their sex scenes. I was laughing the whole way through this thing, relating to it more than I really want to be able to ; ;

This was genius. I'd crit it, but every single thing was fabulous. And I'd tell you my favorite part, but I'd be reposting your whole story! XD AMAZING!

wah~ I loved it o^-^o Of course it only makes me realize how badly my smut can turn out to be ; ; but if you don't mind I'll take it as like a guideline, or tips for when I next try my hand at it! And I was giggling all the way through. Very true and yet still so amusing and adorable.

Haha. Cool and interesting topic to bring up. But I do have to point out something, kissing "can be" sloppy. I know cuz I've experienced damn sloppy kissers. But, the french kisses I shared with my current bf aren't sloppy to the point we get drool all over our... faces. Hell, I think it's not messy at all compared to my past experiences. Unless we're actually licking each other. But the kisses alone, is perfect. I hate sloppy kissers. We all know that sex won't always go as planned. Been there, done that. But hey, there's nothing wrong in writing the perfect scene for PWP. Well, not perfect ALL the way, but still perfect enough. XD Girls (and guys) can dream. Thanks for sharing! At least I learned something more now.

Ella,

You are undoubtedly a genius. Thank you for illustrating the more practical side of intimacy between two...humans. I was both educated and entertained.