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^_^ A new chapter!!! *fangirl squeal*

Poor Sasuke; it's breaking my heart to hear the news about the complex and all as is, I can't imagine what his reaction will be. Sad, mad, indifferent? *cue bated breath*

As for Sai, I'm a huuuuuge fan of Sai, so I'm glad to see him here. And I gotta say, I like the way you wrote him. I know he's damned hard to read, and harder to write, but you've got a great start here. I approve. And I do like how he laid down the law a bit regarding Sasuke. I think Naruto needs that.

I must confess, I'm also dying of curiousity as to what he's up to at the end. Update soon, lest my curiosity cause my head to burst!

Wow. This sounds very promising! I look forward to your next update!!

oh
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you have kept me waiting for so long...this doesnt classify as an update woman!! (u r a chick, right?)
not the point...

PLEASE update soon.... this story is really good and hilarious and...just awesome

*CHIBI Sango offers cookies as bribe*

Ack!! Cliffie! Sai is so jealous over the place Sasuke has in Naruto's heart. And I actually cried when the Uchiha district was being torn down. So sad.

Excellent chapter! Please update soon ^^

Poor SasUKE! Sai better not go back on his promise!! DX

Ok I just read all the chapters and I just can't wait to read more! I can't believe the old broad bulldozed the teme's home! AND a 'kill on site' order too??? WTF!!!

Maybe Sai is Jealous that Sasuke is holding Naruto's attention...maybe that's why he dislikes him...

Post soon!!!

I absolutely love this story. I especially how you took a premise that could be considered somewhat cliche and made it feel completely real-the whole time I've been reading Sasuke's parts, I've actually FELT like I was as small as he, with all the problems inherent. Hell, 'Indian in the Cupboard' didn't evoke this empathic a reaction.

I really hope you continue this, especially now that Sai's shown up! ^_^

Chapter Three: Hahaha, Sasuke took a slice of Naruto’s clothing. >D ____ Naruto in blue. Hard for me to picture. I’m so used to seeing him in orange. But it might make sense. ____ Haha, Sasuke just wants to OWN HIM. XD ____ Boy, aroused from that thought . . . doesn’t take much, does it. =) ____ Lol, Naruto’s remark. “Some assembly required. I hate it when they say that.” I can hear him and see him when he mutters that. =D ____ Heh. And what does Naruto think of being used to rock-climb? ____ Grr, kill the dollhouse! ____ Sasuke can be one hell of a whiner when he wants to be.
Well, white is better than girly colors and design. ____ Hah, Sasuke thinks the dollhouse is cool. ^^ ____ Oops: “At least that’s what he hopped.” You just want one “p” in that. But anyways, I have mixed feelings on the jutsu wearing off. What’ll Sasuke do when it does? He can’t stay here. And what’ll Naruto do? ____ Hehehe, nice one-way exchange here. “ ‘They were too flimsy. I was afraid they would collapse on you.’ Oh.” ____ Naruto’s got questions, I know. He’s going to ask them eventually, right? ____ Naruto’s seen the kind of bed Sasuke slept in? ____ Heh, Naruto seems to be having fun. ____ Ouch, that Velcro’s going to be uncomfortable. ____ Man, this is great! “normal shops don’t carry size ‘Extra Teeny Weenie!’ There is no ‘shrunk ninja’ section for gear of weapons or food!” XD ____ Strange. I can almost hear Sasuke apologizing that way, too. Nice. ____ (*snicker*) The idea of Sasuke flashing Naruto. ^^ ____ Ahhhhh (*BLUSH*) Love Sasuke’s goal for when he gets normal-sized. >_> ____ LMAO!! Good one! “I’m afraid I might see that stick up your ass and never be able to forget the sight.” XDDD ____ Ooh. (*wince*) NICE one, Sasuke. You said the perfect thing. And now that sentence is just going to hang there for awhile. ____ Wow. I wasn’t expecting that. The sudden change in Naruto’s mood. Makes me wonder to what he’s referring to. Is it the reason why Sasuke’s so tense all the time? Or affection? Or what? Hmmm . . . (*ponder*)
Yikes. Lead. (*shudder*) ____ Another good line: “Naruto had always accused him of being emotionally repressed which, ironically, had always made Sasuke show more emotion.” ____ Hey, do you think you can lengthen your hyphens when indicating a pause in a sentence? They look too much like a way of joining words and it’s a bit confusing to me. Sorry. ____ Wow. Wasn’t expecting that. ô_ô ____ Nice question of whether it hurt that bad. And I love how Naruto was so deadpan when he asked/clarified it. ^^ ____ Another stupid complaint from me: The usage of “dobe.” Maybe I’m missing something, but I’m sure that Sasuke only called Naruto that in, like, the third and maybe fourth episode/chapter of the manga/anime. And from then on, he stuck with “usuratonkachi”. ____ Oh, come on. Surely Sasuke could use chakra to get down from there.
It’s hard to make Sasuke ugly. Well, okay, people who hate him do a magnificent job of it, but aside from the silly stuff. He does have a natural beauty. =) ____ Usage of “jinchuuriki” so often seems a little harsh, too. (Sorry for all these complaints.) ____ I wonder if Sasuke was more upset at being put on the shelf than having to have shared his feelings. I get the feeling that it would’ve been okay if they had left it at that. ____ I doubt there’s much of a rift. More likely Sasuke’s just sulking it out. ____ Okay, I don’t quite get this: “suddenly annoyed by the fact that he was too tall for the cramped tub, something that had never been a problem before now.” It sounds like it’s saying that Naruto had never been too tall for the tub before now. I don’t get that. õ.õ ____ Has Naruto asked his questions yet, or is Sasuke mention of “the jutsu will wear off soon” the first he’s heard about it? ____ Ah, here they come. ____ Wow. I liked that, how Naruto persisted with the questions and how Sasuke’s anger slipped and showed how worried he was. ____ Nice, Naruto. He ended the exchange better this time. ____ Heh—Sasuke can probably dry himself. ____ Ah, I take it the PJs have a cute pattern or something? ____ DUCKS!! I’ll take ‘em!! ♥ ____ Heh—I’ll bet Sasuke was checking him out while Naruto was drying off. ^_^ ____ Heh. Cute. Sasuke riding in Naruto’s pocket. =) ____ Um, I don’t get the last sentence. “The blonde had no idea how right he was.” What’s the joke? õ.ô

Chapter Four: D’aww, Sasuke fell asleep in Naruto’s pocket. ♥ ____ I wonder if Sasuke’s going to eventually use the bed in the dollhouse or if he’s going to continue to sleep in the pocket. ____ I wonder if the heartbeat turned soothing later. ____ Spider?? >.< (*hides*) I’m arachnophobia. ____ (*groan*) A friend of Naruto’s. T__T ____ Ahahahaha, that scared ‘em! XD (And woke up Sasuke in the process, I’d wager.) ____ Oh, Hinata’s here, too! =) ____ (*wince*) Might want to stay out of hitting range while you’ve got Sasuke on you, Naruto. ____ I wonder if Ami can talk. She seems to be a pretty intelligent spider. ____ (*shiver*) I’d take rats over spiders any day. T__T ____ Sasuke’s staying hidden in the pocket, isn’t he? Out of sight of Sakura and Hinata? And I’m trying to figure out his thoughts when it says his “jaw dropped” and he “glared with an intensity usually only seen in governing celestial bodies.” My guess is he’s thinking, “There are RATS here??” or, “You’ve got a HUGE SPIDER around here??” or both. ____ Hmm, maybe I wouldn’t like those kinds of rats. They could be a problem. And all the worse if they carry diseases and aren’t shy around people (which they usually aren’t, one way or another). ____ Lol, Sasuke pinched Naruto’s nipple in retaliation! XD ____ Uh-oh. Good question. ____ I guess it is a curious enough question to ask and not too personal. ____ Boy, that’s a tough one. Good luck getting out of it, Naruto. ____ Ouch.
Heheh, Sasuke’s checking him out again. ♥ ____ Nice physical description of Naruto. ____ Eww, gross. Did NOT need that visualization of Ami’s breakfast (though it’s a good one). x_x ____ Heh. But Sasuke’s connection to people eating and watching TV was funny. ^^ ____ Lol, “A very bad feeling settled in the pit of the brunet’s stomach as he watched Naruto tug at the material . . .” Love that feeling of delightful dread. ♥ ____ Oooh, love how Sasuke looks deeper into the situation. I didn’t expect that. =D ____ Heh—nice response, Sasuke. ____ “And anyone who thinks otherwise will have a chat with my fist!” Including Sakura and Hinata? Or is he just ranting? ____ Aww, poor Sasuke. ó_ò Hopefully Naruto’ll change that view a little bit as the story progresses. ____ I don’t get the winking part. (*confused*) ?_? ____ (*snort*) “And your bare butt isn’t getting anywhere near my couch cushions.” As funny as that line is, I wonder if Sasuke might feel a little regretful at the truth of that statement. ____ Suffering from a broken heart? ____ You know, I’m surprised that Sasuke hasn’t had any issues with Ami trying to eat him or something. ____ “All the color was suddenly gone.” Good line. I think I heard something once that that sort of happens to some people when they get really depressed. ____ Nice analogy about the orbit. =D ____ (*snicker*) “I have a natural ability to tune out stupidity.” ^^ And I’ll bet Sasuke’s a wiz at hiding his real feelings. He masks them all the time. ____ That doesn’t surprise me if Naruto can’t sense him. That stuff about sensing one’s chakra in fanfiction might be a little inaccurate if you ask me (which I’m sure you didn’t). I think only a few ninja can do it, thanks to certain abilities; Karin’s radar, Kakashi’s and Kiba’s noses, Shino’s bugs . . . those sorts of things. Maybe Naruto could do some detection if it comes to the Kyuubi’s power, but otherwise I’m not sure. As it is, it might be hard to sense someone when they’re only six inches tall. Unless, of course, that makes you hyper-aware of him. ____ Naruto can hear his heart beating? That’s cool. ____ Awesome, a doll ANBU uniform. =D ____ Lol, “What the hell, dobe?” indeed. ____ Heh—good line: “Meet your stand-in.” ____ Nice forethought on Naruto’s part. I wonder what he was thinking/feeling when he was out buying all this stuff. And it’s clever how the ANBU doll is “camouflage”. They do that sort of thing in real life (for the characters). ____ Naruto still needs to tell Sasuke about his status in Konoha. ____ “He’d become such a coward over the last two weeks.” Good line, even if it’s not really true. I’d be hyper-sensitive myself if I was in his situation, ninja or not. ____ Love the bittersweetness of the idea of Sasuke being stuck like that for a while. ____ “Throwing him under the couch?” YEESH, that’s dangerous! o_o; ____ Sasuke can’t use his Sharingan at all? I doubt they’d help much, but they might. ____ Oh, jeez. That’s scary. ____ Well, maybe Ami will solve it soon. (*shiver*) What a cliffhanger!

Chapter Five: That’s . . . a little odd. I’d apologize first. Surely Sakura would know that much. ____ Say, how old are the characters now? ____ It might be worth hurting her if he wants to keep Sasuke safe. Not wishing that out of malice towards Sakura, just thinking of priorities. ____ Heh—guess Sakura’s feeling awkward about it too. At least she’s trying. ____ “Subculture of Konoha?” Interesting. ____ Hopefully Hinata won’t think to have to use her Byakugan around here. It could be bad if she spied Sasuke. ____ Whoa, seriously? Neji? I can kind of see that. . . . Nice description about how the sentence “seemed to explode into being between Naruto and Sakura.” Really good. =) ____ Is Neji gay? Or is it part of the subculture and doesn’t have any relation towards sexuality? (Though he’s probably gay anyway.) ____ Geez, what happened? Who overreacted to Naruto’s understandable and innocent question? ____ Did they both hit him?? o.o ____ Love the sudden fear for Sasuke when he spotted the situation. ____ So . . . is Hinata worried for her cousin or is she angry? ____ Boy, this’ll definitely freak out Sakura and Hinata. ____ (*SIGH*) Thank GOD Sasuke’s okay. ____ Crap. Tell me the rat’s not diseased. (*worried*) ____ Crash? The dollhouse? And what are Sakura and Hinata doing right now? ____ Nice description of how scary Ami can be when in action. I doubt I’ll have nightmares, but it’s a possibility. (*huddles*) ____ That must feel very weird to have Sasuke climbing up his leg like that. (*shivers*) But amusing, nevertheless. =) ____ Huh? “Put us down?” ____ Oh. I forgot that Naruto lifted the couch. I didn’t know the girls were still on it. (*sweat*) ____ Boy. If I were Sakura, I’d be upset too, but she’s taking it just a little overboard. ____ Go for the latter, Naruto. You could tell her gently, and Ami might still have the body of the rat as proof. ____ Hmm, the indignity. Interesting paragraph about that. ____ Okay, now Sakura’s being more overboard. ____ Warning Sakura ahead of time or not, I still would’ve thought that Sakura would’ve been extremely upset over the pronouncement about Sasuke. Even if she had moved on with her life, surely she’d still feel worried. Unless Sasuke did something like kill Naruto or Kakashi or something. ____ Love Naruto’s sudden view of Sakura as a potential threat. ____ I wonder how Sasuke’s feeling, being stuck next to Naruto’s thigh. =) ____ I doubt Sakura would turn Naruto in; he means too much to her. Even in a fit of anger like in this scene, I doubt she’d do it. ____ Lol. “Sasuke so owes me!” Hopefully they’ll work it out. Sasuke’s probably pissed at being thrown under the couch and the experience under there. ____ GEEZ! O.O I hope Sasuke’s okay! (*flail*) ____ Yeah, Sakura’s an alpha. That “Come on, Hinata!” indicates it. Though we probably didn’t need that to tell us she was an alpha. ____ Owwwch, that’s gotta hurt. >.< ____ Wait. From Naruto’s . . . crotch? =O . . . Oh boy. Oh boy. Oh boy. ____ Oh boy, let’s hope Sakura and Hinata don’t see his crotch moving. They’ll come to the wrong conclusion. ____ Hang on, I thought Hinata was still in the room. When she said, “But what about Naruto-kun?” ____ Straddling? I like where this is going. >D ____ Boy, talk about an awkward situation. XD Is Sasuke even aware of what he’s sitting on? ____ This is very bizarre, but you’re making this scene really good. I didn’t think anything like this would actually happen while Sasuke was in his current state, but this is coming out a lot better than I would’ve suspected. ____ AHAHA! “He’s a dude and we don’t like dicks!” XDDD ____ Why doesn’t he just tell Sasuke to get off of him? =D ____ Lol, “He’s gotta be so grossed out.” I like that view. It really makes you wonder how a straight guy would be feeling in Sasuke’s situation. ____ OWWWWCH! GEEZ! DX ____ Oh. So that’s why Sasuke was so anxious for Naruto to move. Good. I like that. It adds more to the situation than just sexual tension. ____ Aww, he doesn’t really hate him. ____ Cute. Love Sasuke’s response to when Naruto says he hates him. =) ____ I’d say both Sakura and Sasuke owe him.
“Capitulate,” cool. I think I learned a new word. ^^ ____ Love the numbered miracles. ____ It’s funny. This is maybe the second time we’ve heard the line, “Once he was his normal size again, Sasuke was [something] a long, long [something else].” And maybe now would be a good time for Naruto to mention Sasuke’s status in Konoha. ____ This is sweet, seeing Sasuke caring for Naruto. It goes both ways now. =) ____ Ooh, specific number: 197 times. Was that just on Naruto, or had Sasuke seen it all the time? ____ Heh—Sasuke’s ego. ____ More likely the stimulation came from both Sasuke’s actions and Naruto’s feelings. ____ Cool, how Sasuke plans to seduce Naruto with his feelings. ♥ ____ (*snicker*) Pun intended on “he’d been given an inch”? ____ UH—OH. Sai enters the picture. This just keeps getting better! =D

Yay, this story is so cool! Can’t wait to read more! ♥ =D