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Chapter One: Nice opening line. ____ Sooo . . . snake in the bedroom, Sasuke wielding a katana . . . okay, I’m following. ____ Ah, he’s already little. ____ Lol, Naruto’s thought about “It’s official.” ^^ I’m not sure if I approve of the use of “the blond/blonde,” but I’ll overlook it a little bit. ____ Huh. Family name comes second in this story. I wonder why. ____ “The Uchiha” is another awkward one for me to grasp. I understand the usage, but it doesn’t feel right to me unless it’s referring to the entire clan. And I’m well aware that Sasuke pretty much is the entire clan now, but it still seems awkward to me. Okay. Said it. Back to the story. ____ Yikes. That reflex of Naruto’s might not be a good thing with Sasuke this vulnerable. ____ Lol, the “God-awful purple belt.” Call me odd, but I think it looks good on him. Better on him than on Orochimaru. ____ Poison from the snake? Venom or something else? ____ So close the window, Naruto—unless you want to air out the room, of course. ____ Heh—“Even only several inches tall, the Uchiha still managed to look down his nose at the blonde as they stared at one another . . .” That’s quite a talent. =) ____ (*snicker*) Love the silence while Naruto’s trying to process this. ^^ ____ LOL! Naruto’s first comment to Sasuke! XD ____ Lol again, “the urge to reach out and touch Sasuke.” Knowing Sasuke, that’d hurt. ^^ ____ Did he faint? ____ That’s cool about the weight. I take it Sasuke’s pretty damn strong for his size too. Like those ants. I wonder if his chakra’s just as strong as when he was normal-sized. ____ Interesting. ____ Heheh, Naruto tugging Sasuke’s clothes. (Sasuke: “Do you mind?”) ____ Still, wouldn’t that snake bite be large for Sasuke? ____ So Naruto knows some first aid, then? ____ I like that ending line of this scene: “He hadn’t gotten Sasuke back from one snake only to loose him to another, damn it.” (By the way, it’s just one “o” in “lose”. The one you wrote is a synonym for “free”. May want to edit that.)
I hope Naruto’s being careful with Sasuke. It’s not easy to move huge stuff around on a person. ____ Awww, MEAN, Naruto! Don’t burn his clothes, they were cool-looking! D< ____ Cute how Naruto’s happy about Sasuke being back, never mind the state he’s in. ^^ ____ That line, “Sasuke was here and he had come to Naruto for help.” Just hearing that so early gives me this automatic response of, “I doubt it” even if it is the case. Just waiting for the shoe to drop. ____ Aw crap, that sucks about the death penalty to traitors. I understand it, but I hope Sasuke’ll be okay. >.< ____ I take it that Naruto argued heavily against Tsunade’s verdict? ____ So Sasuke’s waking up? ____ You know, I doubt Naruto would need a first aid kit, considering his healing abilities, but maybe he had one around just in case. ____ This story’s so fascinating already! There are so many scenes I’d like to see in fanart! You don’t see this sort of thing a lot! =D ____ So when did Naruto study at the hospital or under Tsunade? I wouldn’t picture him doing this kind of stuff in the manga. Not that I’m complaining, just observing. ____ So what’s Sasuke going to wear since his Sound uniform is gone? ____ Heh—Naruto trying to find all the shuriken. That must be annoying. ^^ ____ It’s cute how much Naruto’s caring for Sasuke. I doubt he’ll get much outward gratitude, but tough—it’s the thought that counts. ♥ ____ I gotta say, Naruto’s handling this better than I would’ve guessed. ____ He’s going to be tired tomorrow.

This is a cool story! I hope, I REALLY hope it doesn’t get abandoned; that it gets finished in the future. It’s too entertaining, and not many people could write about this situation so well and not make it look cheesy. So far, I’m greatly entertained. =D I haven’t read any of your other stories (yet), so I can’t say for them, but this is one I’d really like to see finished sometime.

Chapter Two: Lol, the chapter title. ^^
Heh—Naruto snores. Good thing he stayed awake most of the night, though he’s going to have to fix that problem. (God, I hate snoring.) ____ I wonder how long Sasuke’s been traveling to Konoha. ____ Good sentence: “Though he would never admit it aloud, Naruto had taken the whole situation amazingly well in the Uchiha’s estimation.” Aside from “the Uchiha,” the sentence has a nice sound to it. ____ Uh-oh. ____ Lol, “Cursing Naruto’s lack of forethought . . .” He can be amazingly oblivious or prejudiced sometimes. If he looked around and remembered the night, he’d realize that Naruto put a lot of thought into what he was doing. ____ He can probably still run pretty fast when he’s that small. He was amazingly fast when normal-sized. ____ Whoa, good catch. Good reflexes. ____ . . . the hell? He’s still asleep? How’d he do that? õ.ô ____ Cute, how Sakura cares. Yet I’m annoyed. I’ve got some unfair prejudices of my own, it seems. . . . ____ D’awww, they’re dating! I’m still annoyed at it, but it seems kind of cute. ____ Aha, Sasuke’s jealous. =D ____ Ahahahaha, Orochimaru’s got the same problem! I wonder if we’ll run into him later! =DD And I like that image of Sasuke “breathing down the Sannin’s neck for a cure.” I can see it, too. ^^ ____ Actually, I wonder if they’re really dating. If Naruto’s even aware that Sakura might do this from time to time. ____ Nice description about Naruto’s warmth. ____ So Sasuke did come to Naruto for help. Cool. That was fast. ____ Oy, Sakura. Leave the shoebox alone. Not your business. ____ Lol. “Leave!” ^^ ____ Hahaha, “I don’t feel so good.” =D ____ Cute how Sasuke already suffers the symptoms of LOVE. ♥ ____ Hmm. So what are Naruto’s thoughts on Sakura “stopping by,” I wonder? ____ Interesting . . . I wonder if what Naruto’s saying about Sakura is really the case or if he’s missing something. Perhaps she likes him more than he suspects? ____ Yeesh, I hope he gets better. How long before he arrived in Konoha was he bitten? ____ Another good line: “This had not been an option he had considered when debating the manner of his death since he was a shinobi.” ____ Oh yeah, I forgot he was stark naked this entire chapter. >D ____ Another talent, scaring someone with your expression. I know he’s done that with Sai, Suigetsu and Juugo, but still, it’s cool. =) ____ Hehehe, Naruto’s distracted by the thought of Sasuke going about naked. ____ God, this must be torture for Sasuke, having to have nearly everything done for him. ____ You sure it was the seal for Ram that forms the Kage Bunshin? I thought it was a sign separate from the zodiac signs. ____ Cute, Naruto waiting for a wave goodbye. ^^

These are the first reviews I've made since I've gotten back from vacation. What happened to the good old days when you could just cut&paste and press the button? Now I have to go through all this other stuff . . . (*sigh*)

I really loved your story it's incredible and adorable and I just can't believe you leave us hanging there with Sai in the bathroom. Oh please oh please don't stop writing this story its really great.

im so glad i found your story.. i loved each and every chapter. not only is it well written, but it is also funny and i love the tension between the two. i look fwd to the next chapter~

I don't know how I missed this clever little gem earlier, but I'm glad you've updated so that I could give it a try. It's great. I am not crazy about Naruto being a homophobe, but I know it will all work out. I laughed my ass off when Sakura and Hinata showed up with their dolls, and I really appreciate you not making Sasuke such an insufferable ass. Please update soon, this story is too good!

Oh no! Sai saw Sasuke! Cliffiiieee.

Damn...they won't act on their lusts when Sasuke is that size? That's a shame...I was kind of hoping for some unconventional ways of trying to have some boy lovin' :P

Please update soon, it's just getting good!

omfg!!! i love this fic!! i had lost hope that you wouldnt continue to update...but here u r...updating!!!
please continue!! keep up the excellent work!

*CHIBI Sango offers cookies as bribe*

Oh goodie!!! ^^ This is the first Naru/Sasu story that I've seen with this idea. Its refreashing and new and I think Im in love! lol. I like the sister/brotherly relationship between Sakura and Naruto and them seeing him go doll shopping was priceless. I cant wait to see more of this. Thanks.

lmao pint sized SASUKE! roflmao too funny. can't wait to see what happens next!

Wow. This story sounds very promising! I look forward to your next update!!