rate_review Reviews

*GASP!* Hinata was watching?!
OMG!! so good!
so Sad!
so... so... I love it!
*glomps you*
sorry... I'm a bit hyper right now!

wow. that was intense. and that ending was...phenomenal

alas, it was only a oneshot, but it was incredible
thanks

*CHIBI Sango gives cookies as thanks*

Good story! i like how it ended up being sad for hinata...though i sort of like her...eh, oh well. and i'm sure someone has said this to you, but: LUBE. unless i missed it, you didn't include some sort of lube, which makes gay mansex a LOT more pleasurable, esp. on the first time.
^_^ keep writing ^_^

You've never had gaymansex? Pfft, you need to get out girl. ;)

I liked it, Good job!~

I thought it was really good(and the lemon between Sasuke and Naruto was as well, especially seeing how it was your first one to write), I hope you continue with this story, I'd love to read more!^_^

it was alittle confusing but it was good none the less

i think the only thing I should tell you is that when two men have sex, the one who is topping cannot enter the other without any preparation.
Normally they'll use lotion or lube and stretch with their fingers first before anything else is inserted.
(trust me.. I've had to hear about this from a gay friend who loves his sex... too much.)

I enjoyed that, I didn't think it was melodramatic or sappy either. I think that the scenes of Sasuke in the beginning before, during, and after the wedding were great, you could really feel Sasuke's despair. I also loved his return and everything that happened afterwards. The anger felt real and Naruto's reaction to Sasuke's disappearance felt real as well. It was a little unclear as to whether they had had a sexual relationship before, I had assumed that they were just friends in the beginning but the ease in which they turned their anger into passion made me doubt that. I would be very interested in seeing what happens next. Will Hinata stay in the marriage now that she has seen what she has seen but she must have had some inkling of Naruto's feelings if she was there watching. Why did Naruto marry Hinata? Look at me writing a novel, I just wanted to reiterate that I thought this little story was great and maybe you would be up to writing more.