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This story has great potential, however, when you end almost all of Naruto's sentences in "Believe it" It takes away from the story. I know in the English Anime they do that, but it's really horrible and in fanfiction it just makes the story unbearable.

I like the idea that Sasuke was sent on a mission to kill Orochimaru. Thanks for writing and sharing this.

i really liked this story when is the next chapter comeing out
is it gonna be about naruto&saskue in the shower !! ohh i cant wait =D!!

Well, I'm not trying to be mean or anything, just honest, so pleaz don't hate me, but that was indeed the corniest thing I've ever heard in my life. Every word that came out of just about every characters mouth was pretty predictable and can be found in about a billion of those cheezy romance novels you can buy for 8 dollars at Walmart. If you want to become a better writer, I'd suggest that you start being more original and more realistic. Naruto and Sasuke would never say half the stuff you made them say. I know it's creative writing and all, but if you want to get more readers, I'd suggest actually paying attention to who Naruto and Sasuke really are. It's always a bit risky to make them gay in the first place, but you should at least make it believeable, and so far it's not at all believeable. I'm not the best writer myself, so I won't be offended if you completely ignore this review, but sadly, it's the truth. If your just writing for your own enjoyment, then fine, it's great if you like it, but if your trying to please a wide audience, please work on your orignality and beliveablity. On a happier not, your grammer's pretty good! Well, sorry for coming down so hard on you, but I'm so sick of people leaving crappy one line reviews, that don't actually help the author at all. And pleaz, don't hate me, I'm really just trying to help you. But if you hate me, I guess I'll just have to live with having yet another enemy. Oh well. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading. (Maybe I'll lay off the harsh reviews though)

-Sincerly, Dobe4Ever

Very good. I decided to read the whole thing and then review. Very nice story. Well thought out, well wrote. Oh and one more thing...... IT'S PEANUT BUTTER JELLY TIME!!!!

Very funny, Always late, but not when the interesting stuff happens. Thanks for writing and sharing this.

OOO SNAP! Dang thats messed up! LOL! He walked in on them...That's sad. Update soon please!

i take it you've never watched the japanese version...
>_<
Just one thing, the "believe it" thing gets annoying.
Naruto's thing was always "that's my way of the ninja" but when it was put into english, they thought believe it was better?
Either way, your story could do without it.

OOOOO Update is needed! Update soon I need to know what happens! BELIEVE IT! *grins and winks* k that was a lil special...believe it.

The flashbacks are an interesting look at their relationship. I like them especially since the present isn't quite a happy. But now, FINALLY, they meet again. I'm a little... upset... that you ended RIGHT THERE... but, I'll wait patiently.
Until the next.