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Well, I have a very mixed feelings... The story is definitely well written and deserves high ranks as well as finishing! BUT Naruto is 12 for the most part of the story, 12! OMG, twelve year old boys look as childish as 10 year olds. The thought of an adult man getting turned on by such small child leaves me with only one conclusion... pedophile... and I just can't digest pedophile Kakashi. I know that in yaoi it's fairly normal, maybe soft shonen-ai with "chibi" Naruto is cute and makes you forget the reality. But when very depictive sex scenes come along I keep seeing a very disturbing image of abandoned child looking for love and getting abused instead. You've changed a lot (like parents etc), you could alter Naruto's age as well, not saying he must be 18, but 14-15 year old would have some real sexual desires (puberty, testosterone) and a hint of a man he would become soon in his appearance. It would make his actions little more selfish, sexual than desperate and "crying for help". When 12-13 years old boy does what I read in your story I see a child crying for love and attention, longing for a real father and getting fucked by a man who can't restrain himself in a presence of a child :/ It makes the story very sad.

Your story is very intresting very anguished I can't say I like How his father treats himbut I really like Kakashi softer side even if he doesn't want to admit it I noticed you haven't updated in a while have you lost intrest.

Hi,

I absolutely love your story! The depiction Of Naruto just makes me want to snap him up and never let go and if Kakashi doesn't see how great that chibi demon is then he needs to have hs sharingan checked. I hope you'll eventually finish this story because i'm dieing to see what happens next ( prefarably some council ass kicking).

Really good please continue I am so happy that naruto has finally found someone that makes him happy.

LOVE LOVE LOVE this story!!! My heart goes out for Naruto. It pains me to see how his parents treat him and the way the council is using him. Hope everything will turn out right between him and Kakashi. Thanks so much for sharing! I enjoyed reading this very much! :D

It's awesome Plz update it soon

*____* .... ..... .... ...Jesus Christ. Where do I begin?

WHAT HORRIBLE PERSON WOULD WRITE THIS!? .....Just Kidding! XD

This story is amazing! (^o^) Man, and here on AdultFanFiction I expected absolute smut, but this is smut AND a story plot AND stuff (stuff? YES, STUFF!!!). There's probably other stories like this somewhere on here, I SHALL GO LOOK! Your diction is also absolutely spot on. lol Especially during the dirty scenes. I luv it! > w < If I was a man I would sporting a hard on for days after reading this, straight or not. Muwahahahaha!

I even like the OOC-ness of everyone (and I HATE OOC). I find Naruto to be a bit too adult-ish, but I mean, YEAH, DUR~ With a past like that anyone would have a coming of age at four... or six or something.

AND I WANNA KNOW WHO SASUKE LIKES! He's my LEAST favorite character, but I can't help but feel curious. And I also know who Wolf, Raven and Snake are. xD So obvious. I hope I'm right. I look forward to your updates.

Maaaan~ .... But really, I am so relieved that Naruto lost his virginity to Kakashi. *phew* As much as I love hardcore rape, Kakashi is still the better man suited to be the first to enter Naruto Heaven (Where people can be dirty and not feel ashamed of it. Oh~ho~ho~ho~).

I really like the AN Conscience VS Me in chapter 8! XD love the story by the way

I still think he is scum

*o* I love the way you write! It's so fluid and indepth. Your characters are all so developed...I wish I was as cool as you TxT Oh well--that's why I love reading your stuff. ^_^ I don't usually review stories...even if they are written by some of my favorite authors...>.>; I treat them like regular books, I guess...I can't tell those authors how much I love their work and SUPER wish they'd churn out more--but...I guess since I have that option here...So I'm starting with you! ^(^_^)^ Ya~y!

I just wanted to give you cookies for being awesome (>^_^)>~O ...and...to whine at you for not updating this story DX *emo-whine* I know life happens and you may have become busy, or gotten writer's block (if you have I AM SO SORRY >.<;), or forgotten about it, or haven't felt loved enough to write but...I've been waiting/lurking in the shadows dying--for almost a year--for you to continue this story so I could read it like a rabid wolverine :O Just thought I'd prod you a bit *prod prod*

Keep up the spectacular work, hon _(^_^)b