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for So I'll See you there then?

by chibizoe

schedule November 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Haha! you might want to clear up the last sentence or two in the 5th chapter...
talking about tea... then talking about swirling water with a toe...
made it seem (to me) that he was swirling his tea water with a toe...
which, of course, made my 3-am sleep=clogged mind conjure up kakashi with a foot fetish... (yeah, my mind is BEYOND sleep-fucked...)

eheh ^.^" other than that!! lol
the story rocks, a few off-beat phrases that didn't make sense, and some grammatical errors...
but yeah, awesome!!
<3 ~Kai
schedule September 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow! More?
schedule July 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was a really nice piece. I would have loved to hear the story about how Iruka became a Sexual Dysfunctional Therapist. Bet that would be a good one. I thought it was first just his excuse to get in Kakashi's pants *grin*

Nicely done.. ^_^