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for The Driver

by brook13baby13

person qwerty
schedule July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ack! So sad. Especially that last line.
Good chapter!
schedule July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
yey new chappie.
i was a bit lost ahe begining but i soon caught on ^_^
keep em coming hun :)
schedule July 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Garra should be the date bwhaha cause FWARR! and yey at this story being updated, i squeed a bit.
it still has the potential to be great, just try to proof read it or get someone to beta it (ill do it if ya want :)
cause there are still some gramma and spelling issue but i still like it,
however i do think its rushing a bit i duno, but just yey its been updated,
continue to do so and you will have a mega happy reader hehe
schedule July 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
LOL gaara i spelt it wrong my bad :( ( it is 5am here and ive yet to sleep, FF is so addicting :D )
and i had an idea, do like a speed dating thing that way all three of them can be init. sai with his inappropriateness, neji with his cool indifferenceness and gaara with his im too sexyness. it could be a comical chapter full of fun laughter and suprises, however i'm cool with it just being one of them prefferbly gaara (im sooo biased) but you could or someone else could use speed dating as a potential prompt i think...i would write fic but my attention span for writing is somewhat lacking reading however i LOVE like candy canes
person Reincarnate(too lazy to log in)
schedule July 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sai! Sai! Sai!

cause he's uber sexy as seme or uke.
schedule July 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OK Even though Neji's my man, I'm interested in Sai pairing with Naruto. You hardly see those two paired.
person blur
schedule July 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I pick Neji!!!!! But if Gaara is being pick I will still read the story. Same goes to Sai. :)
schedule July 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's a cute idea and I enjoy your character interactions, but I have to suggest that you find yourself a beta. I mean it's kinda weird when you're talking about how dumb a girls is, like she's never seen a book before, and you totally screw up the sentence. Honestly, this story has some potential and a good beta will make a huge difference.
schedule July 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
cool chapter. i who love sasuxnaru from the depths of my soul has no choice but to choose neiji. because i also love a jealous possesive sasuke and he always at his bext when he has some competition. i can't wait to see the next chapter.
person Alie
schedule July 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
NEJI. NEJI. NEJI. To make Sasuke jealous? I love that. Or at least till Sasuke comes out of the closet. Please put some smut in it too, pretty pretty please.