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Well, if you beg for fogiveness, what can I do?
XD. Anyway... This chapter was really good... I liked the part with the psychologist... And I doubt any of your readers have experience with psychologists, so you're probably safe for that anyway...
I'm starting to like Sasuke more. I mean, he seems all scared and fragile (as Naruto puts it...) But he's better when you continue.
Anyway... That was a good chapter... Naruto and Neji seem weird though...
Oh, and I'm sorry I scared you by putting a whole lot of capital letters, but I couldn't help it. I was hyper at the time...
XD Well, can't wait till next chapter...
Oh, and I have to look at other people's reviews more. I mean, I thought I wrote alot, but it seems like someone recopied the whole chapter in his review! XD
Till next time!
XD LANE

Hello,

I've just read your story and would like to tell you that I really like how it is flowing.Your style gives me the impression to be the silent observer of a real life situation, not just following another play with an overused plot that is so predictable you only need to read the first chapter to know how the story is going to end. (It's happened enough already.)

Please continue delivering such high quality writing. It really makes my day.

P.S.: There is an inconsistency in chapter 3 concerning Anko.

(((He is also just being a bully to Sasuke.)))___
You say Gaara is just bullying Sasuke here. He sexually assaulted Sasuke-and that Naruto didn't punish him for it was lame. You said Naruto was going to make Gaara pay-to me that includes punching the dumb fu_k in the face; so that he wouldn't be forcing kisses on anybody anytime soon. You had Naruto say that Sasuke wasn't just scared; he was terrified_then you had him say he was embarrassed-which is it? Why didn't Sasuke report being assaulted? Still reading, thanks for writing.

((( “I’ll explain everything to Principal Tsunade no one will get into trouble.” He tried to give her his best puppy dog eyes.

To his utmost surprise she folded. “Fine, I’ll write notes for your first class but if he doesn’t wake in the next half and hour then I call his brother)))___This chapter started great. But when you got him to the nurses office it kind of went down hill. The school nurse would never agree to let a student talk her out of contacting the other child's guardian. And what kind of school nurse would let someone lay unconcious for 1/2 hour before checking pulse, blood pressure, smelling salts...If this was an alletgic reaction, Sasuke could have died within that time frame. And why would Shizune suddenly say that she needed to talk with Naruto and Tsunade together about this incident?_and without the patient. It's obvious to the reader that Sasuke had a panic attack; but the nurse wasn't there to see it happen, so she doesn't know whether it's a serious condition that Sasuke may have. A school nurse would not let someone she is medically responsible for be taken out of the office and home by another student without first talking to the guardian and making sure the medical condition isn't serious. It's like you threw logic out the window. If Itachi is as protective as you say_he would always have his cell phone on so that Sasuke could always contact him. I believe he would set the phone to vibrate, not shut it off. That way he could still be contacted by Sasuke but not disturb the class with the phone ringing..

I forgot to mention you having Naruto removing Sasuke's watch to make him more comfortable (so he can be surprised to discover the tell tale signs of someone slashing their wrist). That is the biggest stretch of reasoning I've read in quite some time. Maybe if he watched Shizune move it out of the way to check his pulse_it would have seemed more realistic.

great XD x x x

Ok, you did pretty well for a therapist scene! Actually, I've been to two different types of therapists, a psychologist, who recommended I see a psychiatrist. -The reasons will not be divulged!- If you need details on them, just send me an e-mail at fireprincess59@yahoo.com.

And, to be truthful, a lot of the therapists have waiting rooms where the patients sit down and, well, wait. There, they can talk with each other and tell each other what's going on. They can even divulge information about their situations. At my psychologist's office there was always this couple with two boys that I used to talk to, and they told me every little detail about their lives. I was crying before I got back into the rooms. T.T

Like I said, if you want the information just e-mail me. My years at the psychologist are a little bit fuzzier than the psychiatrist, since I haven't seen my psychologist in over two years now. However, I'm pretty sure that what ever information you need, I can give.

(((“I thing she has a crush on him.” They both got up and started toward their first class. “They make a cute couple if you think about it. Both of them are shy and keep to themselves all the time. In fact I don’t think she has any friends)))___So Neji thinks his cousin Hinata and Sasuke make a cute couple. He also says that Sasuke is basically her only friend. Hinata also has a crush on Naruto. So why would Neji allow Naruto to try and seduce her only friend away from her. Made worse because the one taking her only friend away from her is her crush and her cousin Neji's friend. I would think Neji would ask Naruto to not try anything with Sasuke-because it could hurt his cousin Hinata.

(((.” Looking over momentarily he poked his brother in the arm softly)))___You should have used this opportunity to use a habit that is part of Naruto canon---Itachi always poked his younger brother in the center of his forehead. I'm enjoying the story so far. Thanks for taking the time to write and share it with us.

w00t! loved it! never been to a therapist? coulda fooled me. You described the room and the conversations pretty well. you had a bit too much of anko leading sasuke. my therapist usually just stared at me until i started talking. haha. but the toys and the couches and stuff are all there. i used to draw too when i went to therapy. nothing interesting, just to keep my attention focused. mmm did i mention this was like 2 years ago? (my senior year in high school) gah i'm such a loser! haha. *cough* anyway. the lobby scene is actually practical. i sat in the lobby with other patients too; though none of them ever talked to me. some lady glared at me once. heh. bad guy is... orochimaru? he's such a perv. haha. yeeeaaahh. naruto is such a space-case. doesn't he realise his own feelings for sasuke? and sasuke, he should avoid talking about naruto to itachi. if he's as fond of naruto as anko describes, itachi is sure to pick up on that real quick. sooo, like i said, loved it! and take your time updating, god knows i haven't updated for several months. i'll be ready to read when you post! ^-^ ::heart::