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July 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow perfect.
I was thinking that you would end up making if happen from within a memory but the way you did it was perfect. Plus the song did just what I was hoping it would do for Sasuke, to give him hope. Plus the line you add on at the end with what Naruto said made it complete.
Well done to Itachi for finding the person with the bomb, and I can only hope that with them all together they will soon be able to get Sasuke back from Pein. Plus I feel like I want to both punch Sasori and gave him a shoulder to cry on. Depending on the next few choices that he makes (though I have a gut feeling he is going to end up getting killed if he helps to get Sasuke out).
I loved the scene with Naruto and Sasuke getting an old time photo, it was too cute. But on a kind of darker note this line I think was the best:
I smirked through all the blood and pain, “I’m not yours. I’ll never be yours. You can’t do anything that will change that.”
Even if I wished that Sasuke was not in the position where he needed to say that at least now he is not going to break to that sick bastard and give him the pleasure that he seeks.
Well until next time,
The Black Sand of Gara
I was thinking that you would end up making if happen from within a memory but the way you did it was perfect. Plus the song did just what I was hoping it would do for Sasuke, to give him hope. Plus the line you add on at the end with what Naruto said made it complete.
Well done to Itachi for finding the person with the bomb, and I can only hope that with them all together they will soon be able to get Sasuke back from Pein. Plus I feel like I want to both punch Sasori and gave him a shoulder to cry on. Depending on the next few choices that he makes (though I have a gut feeling he is going to end up getting killed if he helps to get Sasuke out).
I loved the scene with Naruto and Sasuke getting an old time photo, it was too cute. But on a kind of darker note this line I think was the best:
I smirked through all the blood and pain, “I’m not yours. I’ll never be yours. You can’t do anything that will change that.”
Even if I wished that Sasuke was not in the position where he needed to say that at least now he is not going to break to that sick bastard and give him the pleasure that he seeks.
Well until next time,
The Black Sand of Gara
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Dag Nabbit!! I need to read more. LOL. I am totally sympathetic to muses taking you dark places. The Hidan chapter of my Akatsuki series was supposed to be a LOT darker. But I couldn't write what she told me. Especially not the end the way she said to. But at least you're a good girl, and do what they say. I would appreciate borrowing a muse or two. I really need to get going on some all of my stories. Especially since you have 3 kids, and manage to crank out a chappie a day, i only have one of mine, and i have only done 2 one shots. LOL. Love the new chappie by the way. My heart ached for Naruto.
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July 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey,
I noticed that during chapter 6 you didn’t put any lyrics in for the song that Naruto song ‘Drug Lord’s Property’. So I have had the idea in my head for the pass few days and I just read Chapter 9 today and I might of come up with a song for ‘Drug Lord’s Property’, but if you already have a song for it I don’t want to interfere with that … so if you don’t and you want to read my song for ‘Drug Lord’s Property’ you can e-mail me at Kar.zini@gmail.com and I’ll email you the lyrics.
The Black Sand of Gara
P.S. I don’t really listen to a lot of punk songs so it’s more of an Alternative/ Metal song….
P.P.S. I like your story though I do have to hope that it will have a happy ending. Plus I see that Sasuke has forgotten what had happen to Naruto, but maybe he will remember if he thinks about the concert he had gone to. And thinks about Naruto and his songs and his past. So that he realizes that Naruto will always love him, all he has to do is stay sane and not let Pein break him. We believe in you Sasuke.
I noticed that during chapter 6 you didn’t put any lyrics in for the song that Naruto song ‘Drug Lord’s Property’. So I have had the idea in my head for the pass few days and I just read Chapter 9 today and I might of come up with a song for ‘Drug Lord’s Property’, but if you already have a song for it I don’t want to interfere with that … so if you don’t and you want to read my song for ‘Drug Lord’s Property’ you can e-mail me at Kar.zini@gmail.com and I’ll email you the lyrics.
The Black Sand of Gara
P.S. I don’t really listen to a lot of punk songs so it’s more of an Alternative/ Metal song….
P.P.S. I like your story though I do have to hope that it will have a happy ending. Plus I see that Sasuke has forgotten what had happen to Naruto, but maybe he will remember if he thinks about the concert he had gone to. And thinks about Naruto and his songs and his past. So that he realizes that Naruto will always love him, all he has to do is stay sane and not let Pein break him. We believe in you Sasuke.
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July 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow.
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July 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hurray for stay at home moms who can update frequently!!!!
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July 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I Love it chapter 5 was great and I know chapter 6 will be even better so update soon.
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July 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Damn, Jade! Deep plot! OOC Sasuke, not a bad thing. I can hardly tolerate him when he is IC, you know?
Your speedy updates are love. We love you right back. ^_^
Your speedy updates are love. We love you right back. ^_^
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July 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*squee of happiness* yay! a new story. and so far it contains two of my most favorite things. coffee houses with open mike nights, and tattoo parlors. it takes me back to a time before i had kids, and spent every weekend at insomnia, playing my ratty acoustic guitar. and tattoos, i always want more of them. so yippee!!! and jade, your writing is fantastic. ^.^ i LOVE your original stuff!!
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July 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Love it, please continue!
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July 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Maybe he just missed Naruto.
Yeah, I can see that. ^_^
Thank you for speedy updates.
Yeah, I can see that. ^_^
Thank you for speedy updates.