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October 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've said it before on another forum and I'll say it here. This story is very rich in details and plot. I like how you have given the elements and characters your own personal spin. I really enjoyed reading this, and can't wait to read more to find out what is happening to Naruto, Sasuke, and the Kyuubi. Thanks for writing and sharing this.
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October 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh god, I loved this chapter. I've got tears in my eyes while writing this review, poor Naruto.
That does it, this is now my favorite story here. It can't be compared to other fics, because it's so unfic-like. It's like a really good book, or like the real manga in word-form. I think that you're amazing, because you can write so convincingly and so correctly, that it leaves me spechless and amazed.
The way you describe everything, Naruto's feelings and his apperence now as broken, it's amazing. I don't know what to say almost because I'm so amazed right now..
I can't wait for the next chapter. And I know it will be awesome like every chapter has been so far.
Keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs
That does it, this is now my favorite story here. It can't be compared to other fics, because it's so unfic-like. It's like a really good book, or like the real manga in word-form. I think that you're amazing, because you can write so convincingly and so correctly, that it leaves me spechless and amazed.
The way you describe everything, Naruto's feelings and his apperence now as broken, it's amazing. I don't know what to say almost because I'm so amazed right now..
I can't wait for the next chapter. And I know it will be awesome like every chapter has been so far.
Keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs
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October 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
As there is no single word of mine in this chapter, I feel free to comment here where everyone can see it. =D
My heart was bleeding together with Naruto's wounds. You didn't go too far, just enough to make sure we know aware he is surviving hell. I love how Naruto got to see his parents, even if it was in such unfortunate time. I bet he will remember that smile he saw on his mother's face until the rest of his life. I like the appearance of Fugaku - as you already know. :P I love how you did Minato, too.
The descriptions were beautiful - yeah, I know it's an awkward word considering what was it that you were describing, but it's fitting. And I simply adored the ending of the chapter, how Kyuubi worked with Naruto, helped him escape. It was actually touching.
Your writing is more and more beautiful with every chapter you send me, and I simply can't wait for the next part. So go now and write some more! :P
(Sorry about that, I forgot to log in as me)
My heart was bleeding together with Naruto's wounds. You didn't go too far, just enough to make sure we know aware he is surviving hell. I love how Naruto got to see his parents, even if it was in such unfortunate time. I bet he will remember that smile he saw on his mother's face until the rest of his life. I like the appearance of Fugaku - as you already know. :P I love how you did Minato, too.
The descriptions were beautiful - yeah, I know it's an awkward word considering what was it that you were describing, but it's fitting. And I simply adored the ending of the chapter, how Kyuubi worked with Naruto, helped him escape. It was actually touching.
Your writing is more and more beautiful with every chapter you send me, and I simply can't wait for the next part. So go now and write some more! :P
(Sorry about that, I forgot to log in as me)
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October 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Not only are you an amazing writer you're evil as well ;P. That was so evil of you to end the chapter like that, Naruto lying on the ground unconcious!
But nevertheless, I loved it! Poor Naruto, Minato and Kushina. :( I'm glad the bastard, Hiroku, died, what a jerkface.
Anyway, I hope that Sasuke will find Naruto and take care of him until he gets better...aww...*happy thoughts*
Can't wait for the next chpater, you evil one ;P, so keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs
But nevertheless, I loved it! Poor Naruto, Minato and Kushina. :( I'm glad the bastard, Hiroku, died, what a jerkface.
Anyway, I hope that Sasuke will find Naruto and take care of him until he gets better...aww...*happy thoughts*
Can't wait for the next chpater, you evil one ;P, so keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs
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October 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I tried to hold out so I would have two chapters to read, but I couldn't. Your story is too appealing ^_^ Kakashi found Sakura's dead body so no miraculous recovery for her. Bye bye Sakura! Poor Kakashi, someone else to mourn.
Keep up the good work!
Keep up the good work!
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October 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh shit! Naruto went crazy on Konan and totally defeated her, but, like in the randomness of all war, he was taken out by some random dude's cheap shot. Yikes!! Then that other guy kidnaps him??!! I hope Kakashi and Hinata can find him in time. Or maybe the Kyuubi will come back to revive him!
Keep up the great work!
Keep up the great work!
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September 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I couldn't help but read on because of the writing skills displayed in this one. Good job so far and yes it is rare for fanfics around here to display more plot than sex. Although you shouldn't let plot lengthiness bother you, there are some areas where you could economise your words. It would make reading flow smoother and though I myself am a lover of words, I find the human imagination works better with straight forward descriptions rather than lengthy ones. For example, you mentioned at one point about Sakura's organs shifting upon removal of the white sheet. You mention them shifting again along with spilling further down. You could remove the second "shifting" part and just retain spilling.
The above is not mandatory or cruicial and I might only be enforcing my own writing styles upon you. So do feel free to ignore me if you wish. However, overall a nice read and I do look forward to future updates from you.
The above is not mandatory or cruicial and I might only be enforcing my own writing styles upon you. So do feel free to ignore me if you wish. However, overall a nice read and I do look forward to future updates from you.
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September 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter, can't help wishing for more. Poor Sakura, are we going to see a little more of her b4 she dies or is there some miraculous recovery waiting in the wings? He he, I love to speculate. Thanks again for sharing, update soon please.
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September 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOW. That chapter was seriously intense!!
THere are so few people who can capture an original battle that is not only interesting to read but intelligent too. You've succeeded in both accounts. ^^
Keep up the excellent work!
THere are so few people who can capture an original battle that is not only interesting to read but intelligent too. You've succeeded in both accounts. ^^
Keep up the excellent work!
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September 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You know, every review that I've given you so far has mostly started with a "holy shit!" or "omg!", and I think I will continue doing that for a long time ;P
cause damn your chaps are awesome. I totally loved this chapter, poor Sakura, my eyes got quite teary when I read the part about her dying. And poor Naruto, getting stabbed in the lung, ouch, to save Sasuke. Loved it.
Can't wait for the next chapter!.
Luv you!
Keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs
cause damn your chaps are awesome. I totally loved this chapter, poor Sakura, my eyes got quite teary when I read the part about her dying. And poor Naruto, getting stabbed in the lung, ouch, to save Sasuke. Loved it.
Can't wait for the next chapter!.
Luv you!
Keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs