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August 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The chapter is too short. You need to start writing more.
What the fuck is up with Sasuke making out with him right away...it felt rushed.......but not the whole chapter it was still enjoyable up until the time when Sasuke found Naruto.
I love the beginning of the chapter, it was nicely detailed.
I don't know...I kinda like it kinda hate it. You know my stand on Uke!Naruto...it seems you are keeping him in character for the most part so that is the only reason I'll keep reading it XD
Hopefully you don't mess up too much after this point. I might grumble at you some more later or right after you read this >>
Hahahah, Itachi cooking...cute. Hope you'll have more of him in the story...but NOT ItaNaru or ItaSasu...give him someone else to love.
So yeah...good job on updating so quickly but don't rush when you write, people like quality chapters more then fast crappy updates. Not that this was crappy, just their meeting. XDD
Later!
What the fuck is up with Sasuke making out with him right away...it felt rushed.......but not the whole chapter it was still enjoyable up until the time when Sasuke found Naruto.
I love the beginning of the chapter, it was nicely detailed.
I don't know...I kinda like it kinda hate it. You know my stand on Uke!Naruto...it seems you are keeping him in character for the most part so that is the only reason I'll keep reading it XD
Hopefully you don't mess up too much after this point. I might grumble at you some more later or right after you read this >>
Hahahah, Itachi cooking...cute. Hope you'll have more of him in the story...but NOT ItaNaru or ItaSasu...give him someone else to love.
So yeah...good job on updating so quickly but don't rush when you write, people like quality chapters more then fast crappy updates. Not that this was crappy, just their meeting. XDD
Later!
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August 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hehehehehehe oooh i'm sooo luvin sasuke's sadistic side already, can't wait to see what he does with naruto, and i luv how naruto's not just a scared little boy and will at least glare at him :P, hehe please continue this soon, hopefully longer chapters, can't wait, great job so far
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August 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I bet best present ever lol I don't think its goin too slow you have to have some story unless your going for a PWP. Anyways great 2nd chapter!
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July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
it's intereting so far... more please!
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July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
More Ty! You hafta write more! *is gonna get you a little blonde hair, blue eyed boy with a bow on his head for Christmas* ^_^
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July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oooh intresting cant wait to see how this develops
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July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well it's interesting, very interesting.
Nothing special yet....I'll wait for more chapters before I make up my mind on whether I love it or not.
I look forward to the next chapter Tyger!
Heheheheh.
OH AND I HATE YOU FOR ALWAYS MAKING NARUTO SUCH AN UKE! You know I wont read if you make Naruto retarded uke bitch boy.
Yup well *goes back to listening to you play guitar on skype*
Nothing special yet....I'll wait for more chapters before I make up my mind on whether I love it or not.
I look forward to the next chapter Tyger!
Heheheheh.
OH AND I HATE YOU FOR ALWAYS MAKING NARUTO SUCH AN UKE! You know I wont read if you make Naruto retarded uke bitch boy.
Yup well *goes back to listening to you play guitar on skype*
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July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
:D Looking forward to reading more. :D
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July 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah... another slave!Naruto, owner!Sasuke fics. My favorite *smirk* I'm interested in seeing your take on this. Your story seems promising. Great 1st chapter!
update!
update!