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for What is and What Should Never Be

by QueSeraSera

person Onikage
schedule August 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
^.^ It's ok!! I just wanted to re-read it, and.. POOF.. It was gone.. O.O!!

Thanks for the updated chapter, and for the work you put into the story.. ^.^
schedule August 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yay!! Enter: Neji!!


Also, I agree with you. The smut is great.. but ONLY if there is a lot of build up. I don't care so much about random sex.. its the "why" that makes it interesting. hehehe Keep up the good work! ^^
schedule August 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Woo hoo!! second update! (Thank you. ^^ And thank you for the response.)


As for encouragement, I do love where you're going with this. As I said before, its an interesting concept. I loved the fact that you have Naruto confusing aggression with sexual tension. Its a great twist and fits really well with this character.
Keep up the great work. ^^
person qwerty
schedule August 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
VERY interesting.
Keep going!
schedule August 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What do you mean, "if there are enough reviews"? You've already written the next chapter! Post it!!!


Why must you leave the rest of us hanging? :(

Also, I think the idea of forcing Naruto to sit through therapy is a wonderful idea for a story. Having someone to confess his inner secrets to or force him to reevaluate his internal views is deliciously intriguing. Both these things are completely foreign to someone like Naruto who has lacked social relationships for the better part of his existence. Its an interesting idea and by poking and prodding the character with questions and assessing what the answers would be... I think you've got all the makings of a fantastic and interesting story that may lead to unexpected ventures. Naruto has a lot of issues. He many channel them towards something positive (like gaining acknowledgment, being the best ninja he can, becoming hokage..) but they are still issues that both drive and damage his psyche.

Please don't be a story hostage when you've got something that has the potential for gold. If you want to be a writer, then write. The journey of where the story takes you will be its own reward. The reviews are merely the icing on the cake.
Keep up the good work.
person a kitsunes light
schedule August 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE please please post another chapter!!! This is the first time that I've found a story like this!!!! I can't wait to know what comes next! Because I also think the idea of naruto in therapy is pretty interesting! Especially because I always enjoy the most when naruto shows his secrets, and I suppose here he will have to show quite a few or get acostume to some ideas(like liking guys). And I can't wait for that to happen!!! yaaaaay
So... PLEASE UPDATE !!!!!!!
person valencia
schedule August 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ehehe, this should be good
person Ivy
schedule August 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like your first 2 chapters ^_^ The way you explained how Naruto relates pain with love and sex was really good too. I see Neji as more of a dom, but I'm sure your story will make it work with him as a sub ;-)
person Raholea
schedule August 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
naru has issues.. and has to talk about them. i so do not feel jealous.
and sounds like you have some interesting plans for the future. i hope i get to read more soon. thanks!!!
person Onikage
schedule August 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
O.O *is now glued to this fic.* You have my undivided attention..

Please, update soon!