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June 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
omg! Sequel? Sequel!!! Please do that, i loved this like all hell. It was great couldn't be better!!! Please do another!!!
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April 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I meant to review this back when you released the first chapter but i never got around to it. Here i am though and i can honestly say that was a well-worth-read ^_^ I really enjoyed the plot you had going for this. A porn business collaberation, pure gold. And might i say, nice work with the dirty talk. A LOT of fics do that, really poorly. It either sounds cheesy, forced or unbelievable.
Can I make a writing suggestion though? I really think you should start including more setting techniques. Things that seem really uneccessay but you'd be surprised how well they. Stuff like, scents, objects, colours of the walls, things that you can use to symbolise other circumstances and even foreshadow other events. But, all in all, it's a really really good fic.
A sequel might be the ideal thing but, at the same time, expermenting with new ideas or trying stuff that might not even work can spark up the imagination. ^_^ Thanks for writing and keep at it.
Can I make a writing suggestion though? I really think you should start including more setting techniques. Things that seem really uneccessay but you'd be surprised how well they. Stuff like, scents, objects, colours of the walls, things that you can use to symbolise other circumstances and even foreshadow other events. But, all in all, it's a really really good fic.
A sequel might be the ideal thing but, at the same time, expermenting with new ideas or trying stuff that might not even work can spark up the imagination. ^_^ Thanks for writing and keep at it.
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February 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Haa, really hot! 8DD
I like the idea of the Hyugas and Uchihas doing porn movies. XD
And I don't normally even read GaaLeeGaa, but this one was hot as hell!
Seriously. Yummy yummy for my brain. :D
Though..... a gay Neji would've been nice, but he IS a Hyuga after all. XD
Also Hinata and Naruto are together? Heh, that's nice, at least Hinata also knows that he isn't being unfaithful to her with other WOMEN.
And well, not with the men either, not really. But good. :D
SEQUEEEELL !! <3
I like the idea of the Hyugas and Uchihas doing porn movies. XD
And I don't normally even read GaaLeeGaa, but this one was hot as hell!
Seriously. Yummy yummy for my brain. :D
Though..... a gay Neji would've been nice, but he IS a Hyuga after all. XD
Also Hinata and Naruto are together? Heh, that's nice, at least Hinata also knows that he isn't being unfaithful to her with other WOMEN.
And well, not with the men either, not really. But good. :D
SEQUEEEELL !! <3
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February 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like this. Sure, I'd like it be longer, but it doesn't feel forced or rushed despite the fact that it will only be three chapters. You might consider separating your paragraphs to make it easier for us to read it, though. Looking forward to the third chapter. -DL
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January 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
.....:FACEPALM:
BAH HA HA HA HA.
I'm loving this. And to the multiple choice quiz...I pick D) All of the above. :3
BAH HA HA HA HA.
I'm loving this. And to the multiple choice quiz...I pick D) All of the above. :3
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January 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh NOES!! Sad pasts. T-T
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January 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I want more! Please!
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December 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i really think this story is funny and interesting. update soon please!
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December 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh man this is gonna be fucking hilrious!
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October 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!!! That was....... awesome!!!! GaaLee, or in this case, LeeGaa, is one of my favorite pairings!!! I can't wait to see how things turn out!!!