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December 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
damn that was good now i have to wait for the next chapter lol
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November 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i know how hard it is for a child to heal from that kind of pain thank you for writing that and being able to show just how hard it is for a child to heal from the worst kinds of pain it makes me feel like im not so alone now
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November 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is indeed a new take on your typical Naruto fan fiction. I greatly enjoyed it. I recognized the writer tool you used within the first couple chapters. You giving the reader questions that in order to be answered they have to keep reading the story. Despite implementing a new character, you have even managed to retain most of the cannon personality.
With Much Respect
The Prince of Madness
With Much Respect
The Prince of Madness
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July 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I can just see Naruto running all out to Suna only to find Mahina happily eating cookies and milk after Gaara assures her she'll be safe there. I can so see Gaara crushing anyone who comes after her!
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June 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I hope Naruto gets to beat up whomever is trying to hurt his daughter. And then let Hinata have her turn! Nobody messes with her child!
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May 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good stuff, very engaging for a story.
Hope to hear more.
Hope to hear more.
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May 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I Like this so far
keep it up
Leaf > Out
keep it up
Leaf > Out
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May 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Mahina and Hinata go together great! I can just see Hinata becoming Mahina's Mommy figure. After all, Hinata pretty much broadcasts calming feelings with everything she says or does.
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April 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like this so far - is this on FF.net?? I want to add it to my favourites
what does mahina mean?
what does mahina mean?
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September 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok, this story is not bad actually , a little short in chapters, though I just prefer long chapters. I do want to know what happened to her and what will happen next even though this story is one of the darkest I have seen and yet i cannot shake the sense of foreboding doom off, Orochimaru is a real sicko, but the mystery behind the girl intrigues me.Please update