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February 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ive never read, seen, or even thought about HidaSasu as a pairing, so this was a first.
A very, very good first aswell ;P
I made a mental note at the beginning to tell you that the sentences were way to long, some going up to 3 or 4 rows without a single , but somehow
that changed during the middle of the story and the grammar was very neat.
Funny thing was that I actually thought somewhere along the way 'damn this author uses a lot of different words for penis' so Reading the AN later on was quite funny :)
All and all the story was very nice, and iwas suprised by the hotness of this pairing, both characters fierce and funny.
A very, very good first aswell ;P
I made a mental note at the beginning to tell you that the sentences were way to long, some going up to 3 or 4 rows without a single , but somehow
that changed during the middle of the story and the grammar was very neat.
Funny thing was that I actually thought somewhere along the way 'damn this author uses a lot of different words for penis' so Reading the AN later on was quite funny :)
All and all the story was very nice, and iwas suprised by the hotness of this pairing, both characters fierce and funny.
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I knew as I was reading that there had to be come sort of challenge associated with all your creative penis-euphamisms. Made me double-take a few times, but explainable. But - lumberjacks? XD Kay, then. Still, you wrote them well, considering the constraints(I'm guessing?).
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August 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I liked the story (the pairing scared the hell out of me, but you made it work!) Sasuke's such a slut...
But please, PLEASE do not use words like "joystick" and "mantenna" again. That was horrifying. :p Maybe you could have an alternate version with slightly less bizarre word choice, just for readability?
But please, PLEASE do not use words like "joystick" and "mantenna" again. That was horrifying. :p Maybe you could have an alternate version with slightly less bizarre word choice, just for readability?