rate_review Reviews

Awesome job! I'm glad you did the single apostrophe for the thoughts cuz it made it flow a lot better. Great job and I really like this story:)

I've been reading this story for quite some time, and I found myself drawn in.
I really like this story.

Can't wait 'till the next chapter!

omg. that was awsome.

Someone ought to whoop Kakashis ass. He is the king of pedopervs in this story and I truly hope that he won't manage to lure Sasuke away from Naruto. Please, please purty please update soon! Don't keep me in suspense.

I want more *_*

GE mig meeer! x'D

Wow another great chapter keeping going...I lik Sai in this on but Kakashi better watch out so Sasuke doesnt smother him wile he sleeps...lol...and u cant hav Naru-chan and Sasu-chan leave its not possible

GIMME THAT MANGA!!!!

kakashis such a douche and a pedophile at this rate.wonder why none of narutos friends dont notice somethings up and try to budin or at least do something to help even if naruto doesnt want it.i thought iruka would have come and yelled at kakashi for upsetting naruto just because hes narutos teacher and he cares.if sasuke heard what kiba and narutos other classmates called him and acted with him i bet hed be jealouse.hope you can update soon

Grrrr I can't believe what an asshole Kakashi is in this story. I usually like him but here he's just aweful. You can't have Sasuke move in with him you just can't! I do understand Narutos insecurities and worries but I wish that he would grow a backbone and punch the pedo teacher out. Pleeeze updade as soon as possible I need to know what's going to happen!!!!

You need to differentiate between thought and dialogue. You can't use a double apostrophe for both, it's confusing to the reader. Just putting 'he thought' at the end of it doesn't help. I thought Naruto's thoughts were other people's dialogue and it really messed with the flow of the story. Most people either use italics for thoughts or a single apostrophe ('I was the one who refused Sasuke yesterday but since I woke up this morning all I been thinking about is how it felt when Sasuke touched me,' Naruto continued to think as he tried to get away from Sai.). When people see either of those, they know it's a thought.

Other than that, this is pretty good. I like the story and the plot, it's good.