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Oh man, this fic is brilliant. You've got to continue this. Doesn't matter if some parts don't exactly match canon anymore--'gives a shit? There were a lot of typos, too, and I just didn't farking care. This is pure gold. It's so hard to find decent writers in this fandom--an ocean of fanfiction and you're damn lucky when you happen on something interesting, plotty and in-character like this. And your prose is beautiful. Dialogue is flawless. You expertly keep up the romantic tension and the suspense, without sacrificing one for the other. I'm gonna check out your other fics too now. Please don't leave this one abandoned forever--it would just be a tragedy.

This story is really good, and like with many of your others, I am sad that you seem to have decided not to take it any further. I liked how you introduced the sexual part of their relationship, and the tension between them before that. I always love confident, aware Naruto, and you do him justice. But, dammit, why only the one sex scene? I want more, ones where Naruto isn't about to die without it, and they both know they want it but just can't help themselves. Forbidden sex is just so hot. Oh, and Naruto tops (of course, heh).

Also, I want more of the one where they are mutants, and you had a time skip and then... nothing. The hallway sex scene in that was so, SO hot, but that was it :( Anyway, I appreciate that you are still writing b/c I think you are one of the better people out there, so thanks for putting your time and effort into creating something that I enjoy so much!

Continue please!!! I am completely enamored with this story, and I'm dying to read the second part!

Awesome story! Oh, and it'd be great if the rest was from Naruto's POV!

*Glomps u* Oh how I love when you update. I'm so sorry I know I'm horribly late but I limited computer access right now. So I've been sneaking in moments every so often. Actually honestly this is one of the few stories I'm still following. Most of the others have been pushed to the wayside due to time constraints, but God I love this story! LOL, end of part one huh XD. It was a rather exciting end. So promising XD. Can't believe Naruto got so bold as to just demand a kiss XD. I'm so happy. Is he finally going to stop beating around the bush and just go after the bastard? Sasuke won't know what hit him. I'm also loving the direction of the mystery plot. I was a little nervous at first when they started going after the demon one time and so furiously cause I was thinking, damn, that means it'll soon. But nope XD. You managed to throw in another plot twist, involve Itachi, and get Naruto and Sasuke primed for another trip XD. YAY!!!! Although I suppose they won't be able to go on this trip all by themselves. Not if it's gonna be an official visit. But meh, I'm excited anyway XD. *huggles you and loves all over*. I'll be waiting patiently for part two! paitently but excitedly XD. Oh about the point of view buisness, I would Love to be able to get some insight into Naruto's head in this, but I love your Sasuke so much, I don't want him to disappear entirely. but honestly it's completely up to you.

I really love the story so far!
The whole thing with the demon is very unique and I think also well thought through.
Can't wait for the next part but I would like it if you would keep it in Sasuke's pov. Most stories I read have Naruto's pov so I'm always happy if I can read something in Sasuke's pov that is as well done as yours :)

well that's interesting. im not sure that you should change the pov i mean it probably would be ok but i kinda like it as more as a sasuke/3rd person. or whatever it is as of now. can't wait for part two! it made me smile to see what itachi had tried to do.

I like what you did in changing the kissing scene a bit. It definitely turned out hotter than before. I also like the intrigue of Itachi having apparently tried, and failed, at taking the threat of the demon away. I can't wait to see what happens in Rain Country. There's a fair amount of suspense surounding the middle and the very end of the chapter in reference to the seal code and an edgy feeling in having to search another country, especially that one, for the box or the demon it held. But, now that this is out, you know what story I want to see next, right? I hope the next chapter comes quickly all the same.

I like the story being in Sasukes point of view because he's the most stoic and non-emotional one and therfore, to keep him in character, you wouldn't be able to tell what is going on in his head. But I would like to know what's going on in Naruto's head as well. I really liked the thoughts of jealousy when Sasuke was thinking about Naruto going to a brothel. It was sweet. I like the thought of Sasuke persuing Naruto for once...it doesn't happen very often. More physical interaction would be nice too...hint, hint!

this chapter was amazing! and whatever you think, but it would be kind of nice to keep it in Sasuke's so we don't know what N is thinking. Not that I don't want to know, but it might break the suspense and lord that was a hot kiss and damn what IS Naruto thinking... but yeah... so now you have seen the two sides of myself... the fangirl... tell me tell me!
And the author... ohhh the suspense... ohhh soo good.
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