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June 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
well wanted to start with something small lol
i really love the way you write your very descriptive and you characterize really well
you not only follow the original idea of the anime but you add your own touch
is great to see the use of japanese specially used correctly
you used a good amount of dialogue and your story was witty and really left me wanting more
i really love the way you write your very descriptive and you characterize really well
you not only follow the original idea of the anime but you add your own touch
is great to see the use of japanese specially used correctly
you used a good amount of dialogue and your story was witty and really left me wanting more
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October 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh my gosh, I love you for writing this beautiful piece but I hate you for leaving me there! I must know what happens and soon!!
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October 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You got me really curius!!! Now I REALLY wanna know what happend!!!
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October 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this had a very different feel to me than how i normally feel when reading gaa/naru..i can't really explain how, but i liked it!
i really like the little details you put in with gaara wanting to constantly touch/have a hold on naruto. it was very sweet. they are very sweet.
and naruto's playfulness to gaara's 'don't even think about it.' makes me giggle!
also:“Inner-dialogue is suppose to stay in, Gaara!” heehee, cuteness &hearts
the description of the waterfall was pretty cool. i especially liked the detail about how the water sounded as they were floating in the pool.
gaara's concern about naruto getting too close to the waterfall was very sweet. (am i saying sweet enough?) and naruto's 'frog-like stroke' cracked me up for obvious reasons..
...that freakin staircase was randomly creepy lol, and then their solution to the "problem" actually gets them in trouble...gahh! you and your cliffies..i think you caught the suspense/mystery bug from me and ren...or maybe it's the aura of approaching halloween?? ...or MAYBE the crackdom of that silly madlibs-like drabble creator put some crack in ya lmao! i wish we knew what happened next! ..maybe *someday* you will let us know in a sequel/continuation..?
anyway, i still liked it. the abrupt ending kinda made me giggle despite itself..maybe because i, also, am in that strange halloween mood? like when you watch old halloween/horror flicks and nothing is really resolved in the end but it's still a great ride and just leaves you wanting more?
>.>
*shrug*
&hearts
~ lg
i really like the little details you put in with gaara wanting to constantly touch/have a hold on naruto. it was very sweet. they are very sweet.
and naruto's playfulness to gaara's 'don't even think about it.' makes me giggle!
also:“Inner-dialogue is suppose to stay in, Gaara!” heehee, cuteness &hearts
the description of the waterfall was pretty cool. i especially liked the detail about how the water sounded as they were floating in the pool.
gaara's concern about naruto getting too close to the waterfall was very sweet. (am i saying sweet enough?) and naruto's 'frog-like stroke' cracked me up for obvious reasons..
...that freakin staircase was randomly creepy lol, and then their solution to the "problem" actually gets them in trouble...gahh! you and your cliffies..i think you caught the suspense/mystery bug from me and ren...or maybe it's the aura of approaching halloween?? ...or MAYBE the crackdom of that silly madlibs-like drabble creator put some crack in ya lmao! i wish we knew what happened next! ..maybe *someday* you will let us know in a sequel/continuation..?
anyway, i still liked it. the abrupt ending kinda made me giggle despite itself..maybe because i, also, am in that strange halloween mood? like when you watch old halloween/horror flicks and nothing is really resolved in the end but it's still a great ride and just leaves you wanting more?
>.>
*shrug*
&hearts
~ lg
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October 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hmmm gaara and naruto huh? awesome. i get so TIRED of sasunarusasu all the damn time.
i like how you write naruto. he is so playful and cute!
gaara needs to have physical contact.. that is so sweet! and naruto realizes it and gives him
what he needs is really awesome *laugh* i like this ficlet.
“Inner-dialogue is suppose to stay in, Gaara!” The teen’s cheeks dusted a nice shade of pink still, at the red heads words.
hehehe poor gaara.
i like how you describe the sound of the water when their ears go below. 'quiet depths' is a nice way to put it
i adore the ending. kinda saw it coming, as i saw the chapter was coming to an end very soon.. but i love it very much!
*hugs this story* Happy Birthday Naruto indeed.
love you tsuma
-ren
i like how you write naruto. he is so playful and cute!
gaara needs to have physical contact.. that is so sweet! and naruto realizes it and gives him
what he needs is really awesome *laugh* i like this ficlet.
“Inner-dialogue is suppose to stay in, Gaara!” The teen’s cheeks dusted a nice shade of pink still, at the red heads words.
hehehe poor gaara.
i like how you describe the sound of the water when their ears go below. 'quiet depths' is a nice way to put it
i adore the ending. kinda saw it coming, as i saw the chapter was coming to an end very soon.. but i love it very much!
*hugs this story* Happy Birthday Naruto indeed.
love you tsuma
-ren
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October 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok, that was creepy, I was picturing it as I read because your detail is so explicit it's like I'm there. Gaara is so sweet the way he treats Naruto, very lovingly protective. I love that you mention him touching Naruto always needing that touch from his lover to reassure him. I wish it wasn't a oneshot.:( Anyway, Happy Birthday Naruto!!!!
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October 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Egad! What kind of cliffie was that?? O_O You just potentially killed Naruto on his birthday! I certainly hope this isn't a oneshot. :(
Keep up the good work!
Keep up the good work!